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  1. Karel Segers Mentor · 5,093 pts on A socially deprived, true crime obsessed man becomes infatuated with a Jane Doe case, and documents his pathetic attempt at inserting himself in her story by solving the case. ★ Best

    A socially deprived, true crime obsessed man becomes infatuated with a Jane Doe case, and documents his pathetic attempt at inserting himself in her story by solving the case. Great main character in that he has both a flaw and an obsessive drive. The major…

  2. dogger Penpusher · 256 pts on Revised: Desperate to prove himself worthy of his civil rights activist wife, whom he crippled in an accident, George obsesses about the JFK promise, turning into a delusional quest to prevent assassination. ★ Best

    My SOP is not to read plot summaries accompanying a logline. Why? Because the logline has to stand on its own. It must clearly and succinctly state who the protagonist is, the objective goal, the antagonist (or obstacle) and what's at stake. It must hook…

  3. dogger Penpusher · 256 pts on 1880s London: As an American assassin struggles with her dead father’s vengeful spirit, a mysterious cult attempts to brainwash her into killing Queen Victoria. ★ Best

    In 1880's London, a mentally tormented American woman, brainwashed by a mysterious cult, plots to kill Queen Victoria. (18 words) The cult has to succeed in brainwashing her. At least temporarily to motivate the plot. I don't understand why this would be categorized as SciFi…

  4. dwon Penpusher · 141 pts on A selfish drunkard is forced to run a startup and fight powerful government agencies after he inherits it from his righteous entrepreneur best friend who died mysteriously. ★ Best

    When his tech genius best friend dies mysteriously, a Luddite wastrel must complete his invention while fighting off a brigade of spooks intent on capturing it.

  5. savinh0 Mentor · 3,334 pts on When a white supremacist cop is confronted by billboards calling out his chief’s neglect of a rape and murder case, he must silence the victim’s bitter mother and return peace to the town. ★ Best

    Good version, Karel! I was just wondering if the logline wasn't told from the perspective of the mother (Frances McDormand)? I thought she was the protagonist.  

  6. Mike Pedley Singularity · 51,300 pts on A demonically supercharged serial killer dupes his way into a single mother’s life which rouses a talented FBI agent from retirement and awakens Poseidon. ★ Best

    What's Poseidon got to do with it? How is a completely normal FBI agent with no superpowers supposed to stand his own against a superpowered serial killer? How does him duping his way into a single mother's life get any attention from the FBI? If…

  7. Chris_P Logliner · 396 pts on When a meek chemistry teacher is diagnosed with lung cancer, he must earn $740,000 by cooking meth to provide for his family after his death. ★ Best

    I like it. Catchy, intriguing, and overall it looks like it could be a fun show to watch. Kinda gives me Queen of the South vibes though the initial storyline is of course, different.

  8. Odie Samurai · 2,208 pts on Professor Taian Russo returns possessed artifacts from a mysterious island where Heather, a 17th century Scottish woman, was exiled to.? He must help her find peace before her possessive powers take full control. ★ Best

    I dig it ZarahNZ, here are my thoughts: Since Taian and Heather are not historical characters e.g. William Wallace, they add no value to the reader and steal precious space from your logline ? see the Formula link at the top of the page for…

  9. Richiev Singularity · 82,714 pts on When Michael loses his wife and two children in a horrific car accident, he recovers a tunnel to the past before they die, and fights against fate to prevent them from taking the car on that fateful day. ★ Best

    I had a weird thought for this:A: What if the husband succeeds in saving his wife, but in the process is hit by the very car which killed his family.B: The story returns to the new timeline the wife is alive, the husband is dead.C:…

  10. Richiev Singularity · 82,714 pts on A duty bound son must become the next guardian of a dangerous power. ★ Best

    If you say 'must', you should give us the 'or else'