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Samurai · 2,208 points

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An Ex-CIA interrogator with a new life as an acupuncturist must survive Public Enemy No. 1 when her interpretive healing accidentally goes viral and exposes her government-subsidized hideout.

June 10, 2020
A down-on-his-luck videographer breaks his estranged mother out of prison to steal the grand prize from a filthy rich YouTuber – a million-dollar Bitcoin.

May 14, 2020
With the help of his undead lost love, a reluctant store manager must return to the island where she was slain to prevent the escape of a primitive evil before the anniversary of her death.

April 9, 2020
An overnight caregiver and a bored stiff succubus form an unlikely alliance to launch a dark web speed dating site.

April 4, 2020

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on When a 75 year old woman manage to hack into CIA, she´s hunted by the hardest cyber-cop you’ll ever find – her own son

Example: When a recipe search results in hacking the CIA, a 75-year-old woman is hunted by the world's toughest cybercop – her son. I hope you find this constructive.
on When two students in a chemistry lab accidentally produces an aphrodisiac , it is inhaled by the two people they wanted to date respectively. Together they must find an antidote but they have no knowledge of chemistry.

The logline is missing the stakes, the reason why they must find an antidote. Reconstruct the logline so the community or I can help. Research: Watch (1992) "Love Potion No. 9" Take care.
on When a guy is frustrated by his life situation he learns that all problems lies with the body, so he learns to have an out of body experience, but when he experiments he leaves the body but doesn’t know how to come back. He has 14 hours in hand before the body will be cremated.

Leaning towards: When experimenting with astral projection, an unhappy with his skin [young man] has 14 hours to find a way back to his physical body before being cremated.
on “In the wake of their caretaker becoming injured, two disabled family members must prove to a social worker that they are best cared for by each other.”

Thanks. Yeah, I had to look at when social workers typically do their checks. 30 days was the number I got back from the interwebs. Take care.
on “A caregivers journal, with accounts of her experience, gets in the hand of a young person revealing many hidden secrets.”

Which war?
on “In the wake of their caretaker becoming injured, two disabled family members must prove to a social worker that they are best cared for by each other.”

It is a fantastic start which grants you the ability to add color based on your story. Example: Two dysfunctional and disabled sisters have 30 days to prove to a social worker the best care is each other when their…
on With a killer on the rampage in forested upstate New York during the late 1960’s, a sensitive young African-American woman must overcome her insecurities to protect her friends and apprehend the deranged maniac.

Leaning towards: Deep in the forests of 1960s upstate New York, a timid African American is forced to defend her hippy friends when a maniac killer shatters their newfound commune.
on In a world where virtual prisons are considered humane, a female inmate discovers she’s part of an elite-driven psychological experiment, and must fight to maintain her sanity and avoid becoming a tool for societal control.

Another angle: When sentenced to a virtual prison, a VR inmate must overcome a brutal elite-driven psychological experiment to expose her captors in order to escape.
on The A group of perfect student decide to describe in a school exclusively for good students. When they started their studies, they’ll find in a place of madness, where the only way to alive is escaping from the wall that covers all the school

Leaning towards: Behind the [dark] wall that surrounds a pristine school, a group of gifted students take a shot at freedom when they discover the academy is not what it seems.
on 🔥💧EMPÍDOCLUS: The sands of time🌪️⛰️ – Movie {🐺}

Example: On a distant planet governed by elementals, an unlikely group of [masters] set out to defeat the corrupt fire… Honestly, the rest of the logline falls under the "Show, don't tell" rule.
on After uncovering a grisly homicide near her newly assigned rural workplace a demoted city detective must play a game of cat and mouse with colleagues to reclaim her old job while covertly fighting to attain justice for her daughter.

Leaning towards: When reassigned to a small town leads to murder, a demoted detective fights to reclaim her position and justice for her slain daughter.
on In a world where virtual prisons are considered humane, a female inmate discovers she’s part of an elite-driven psychological experiment, and must fight to maintain her sanity and avoid becoming a tool for societal control.

If the protagonist's mind is her prison, does she fight to expose the baddie experimenters to stop the maltreatment of inmates?
on In the quaint town of Ravens Circle, Nathaniel’s love for Julia intertwines with shadows from his past. As the ancient oak watches, their romance becomes a battleground, unraveling tragic secrets that echo through the town’s haunted history.

There is a lot of shadow in this logline. This is what I was able to glean: In a quaint hamlet with the darkest past, a troubled [young man] budding romance unravels when a malevolent force seeks another [victim of…
on An ex-cop with PTSD, hired to avenge the murder of a child, is partnered with an artificial intelligence, but soon discovers the intelligence could be lying and must find the truth before another child dies.

Leaning towards: Hired to avenge the murder of a child, an ex-cop with PTSD is partnered with a [shady/shadowy/unscrupulous] AI [vehicle] to find the truth before another child dies. It's almost 2024. Break the mold by abbreviating "artificial intelligence" 😉…
on An ex-cop with PTSD, hired to avenge the murder of a child, is partnered with an artificial intelligence, but soon discovers the intelligence could be lying and must find the truth before another child dies.

If you don't mind, what form does the AI take?
on Una adolescente prodigio se embarca en una aventura por los basurales de la ciudad para encontrar a su tío que ha sido secuestrado por la Mafia a cargo del manejo de los desechos.

Blame it on Google translator if I mucked this logline up ;) A teenage detective sets out to the Mafia-run garbage dumps in order to rescue her kidnapped beloved uncle. I hope this helps. Keep going!
on When A financially and morally bankrupt government lawyer is assigned the case of a revolutionary who is keen to be hanged, he must fight against the british monarchy to defend him or lose his practise.

Leaning towards: When assigned a death penalty case, a financially and morally bankrupt government lawyer must overcome the British monarchy to defend a revolutionary or lose his practice.
on A man from earth is taken to magical world, where nonhuman races exist and where humankind are the myth, finds he is part of a prophesy to stop an evil wizard from killing a princess prophesied to commit one act to thwart the dark forever.

Glad to hear you pulled through! Example: Teleported from Earth to an enchanted realm, a prophesied hero must rescue a princess in order to stop the spreading darkness of an evil wizard. Make this yours, keep going!
on In 1933 Germany, a time-travelling teenage outsider from 1914 discovers that his daughter has become entangled with a communist terror group. Now, he must infiltrate the organisation to protect her from the dangerous path she’s chosen, all whilst wrestling with the seductive pull of the rising Nazi youth movement.

I would love to watch it. In 1933 Germany, a time-traveling teenager from 1914 must save his newfound daughter entangled with a communist terror group, all while wrestling with the seductive pull of the rising Nazi youth movement. Keep going!
on a pure-heart fairy could change the nature of deserted mythical island and made it all connected by the power of her heart.That island was hidden away from the bared eyes of men who chased its tremendous treasure till a Persian merchant could find away in and tried to break that unity down to have the long-talked-about treasure.

An orphaned fairy sets out to protect her beloved mystical island from a pirate dead set on plundering its long-sought-after treasure within. Make this yours. Keep going!