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  1. Karel Segers · Maestro · 2,970 pts on When two broke musicians witness a gangland massacre, a womanizing saxophonist disguises himself as a woman, joins an all-girl band, and courts its singer.

    Sounds good. But also familiar.

  2. karel.segers · Initiate · 63 pts on When his liquor licence is stripped due to unpaid bills, a neurotic publican must win the local fishing competition’s cash prize, but when he realises he is competing against his abusive father, he must control his manic behaviour to out-fish him and save the pub he calls home.

    This is a review! Did the bell work?

  3. Karel Segers · Maestro · 2,970 pts on An educated Indian homemaker in Sydney enters a local council election, hoping to reclaim the identity her ambitious daughter no longer sees, while the daughter fights for a director promotion; as both women struggle to be taken seriously, their parallel journeys slowly transform how they see each other.

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  4. dogger · Oracle · 87,400 pts on After ICE arrests his undocumented girlfriend during a raid, a quick-witted loafer who joined only to skim money from the agency he despises must risk exposure to smuggle her from detention before she is deported.

    The story is certainly topical. And controversial (understatement). You labeled the story as a comedy. My expectation is that it will play out as a dark comedy. I like most of the ingredients for your script, but I have concerns about the recipe, the proportions…

  5. philasify · Mentor · 528 pts on After an accident cripples the woman he loves, a guilt-ridden young man takes on America’s scars as his own, risking everything to change the course of history and earn the love she freely gives.

    There's way too much vagueness after the beginning. Take's on America's scars? Is that his woman's name? Is it the country of America? Risking everything to change the course of history how? It's just too abstract all the way around.

  6. dogger · Oracle · 87,400 pts on When a flight attendant smuggles on a chainsaw and starts butchering passengers mid-flight, an aerophobe must bottle his panic to take down the killer and save his family on board.

    I suggest refocusing the logline on the story hook, the grab. Which, IMHO, is not one passenger's flight phobia. What grabs my attention, what stokes my imagination and curiosity is the flight attendant. What's her (his?) backstory? What motivates her (him?) to plan and execute…

  7. philasify · Mentor · 528 pts on After dead bodies start piling up, a family lawyer enlists the help of wrongfully accused street hustler to tail the killer, but what happens if the killer is hiding in plain sight.

    Don't keep secrets in the logline; spoil the movie to get a reader to check out the script. Reveal who the killer is or at least be less vague.

  8. philasify · Mentor · 528 pts on When akward Miles Morales,ascends as the next spiderman he is forced to use his new powers to stop the Evil Kingpin,from attaining the master-key of the doomsday collider that threatens to vanish humanity into the abyss.

    Isn't this an existing movie? Is this an attempt to give an existing movie a logline?

  9. philasify · Mentor · 528 pts on Three good for nothing youths unexpectedly gain superpowers and must save their crumbling city, YGN, from complete destruction.

    A bit too vague and generic. There's nothing that really sells the reader on the story other than it being a run-of-the-mill superhero story.

  10. philasify · Mentor · 528 pts on When James finds himself infatuated with his coworker Cindy, he is torn by the sinister advice of the sentient food in his fridge and the feelings of love felt in his timid heart.

    Interesting premise but the logline needs stakes and a better hook. What does the protagonist have to do, what happens if he doesn't get what he wants? What resolution is out of reach? What ticking clock must he work against?