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Samurai · 3,334 points

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When her country gets overrun by the Huns, a Chinese teenager girl steals the conscription order from her sick father and dresses up as a boy to fight for the army, but if her secret gets revealed she will face the death penalty. (Mulan 1998)

August 21, 2023
A talented high schooler, diagnosed with a growth disorder, must overcome the odds in order to achieve his dream of playing professional basketball.

May 10, 2023
After he sees his favorite world-famous musician at a concert, a failed writer meets her in his dreams, but he only has 6 hours before he wakes up to earn a kiss from her and convince her of him.

May 24, 2022
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After falling in love with twin sisters, an irresolute Iranian student has to decide with whom he wants to spend his life with before getting forcibly married to an unkown woman by his family.

May 11, 2020
After accidentally landing in North Korea with a paraglider, a rich South Korean heiress with the help of a North Korean military officer has to find a way out of the country without getting arrested and killed. -Crash landing on you (2019) -37 words

May 4, 2020
After losing the love of his life in the streets of India, a homeless teenager participates in the TV show? Who wants to be a millionaire to find her again. Film: Slumdog Millionaire (2008) (30 words)

April 24, 2020
When a terminally ill student wants to commit suicide, he meets an enigmatic girl who gives him new courage to face life, only to find out that her life expectancy is lower than his.

April 22, 2020
After a shy teen falls in love with an unknown girl he dreams of every night, he sleeps all day to be with her, but ultimately he has to overcome his shyness in order to find a real girlfriend.

March 29, 2020
When a broke but aspiring law student working as a seat filler falls in love with a popular singer, he pretends to be a famous entertainment lawyer.

July 23, 2019
After a homeless toddler sells his beloved cuddly toy for millions of dollars and lives a life like a king with hundreds of toys, he realizes that money is not the same as happiness, so he goes out to find the owner to get his toy back.

July 23, 2019
After an outsider college clique finds that a young magic poet can write love poems that make every woman fall in love with them, they kidnap the guy, only to find out that real love has to be mutual.

July 18, 2019
After falling for the tennis world champion, a no-name photographer gets a job at the Wimbledon tournament and pretends to be a successful newspaper owner to win her heart.

July 10, 2019
When a social phobic former photographer falls in love with the number one tennis star in the world, he must overcome his anxieties in order to get back his job and be with her.

July 4, 2019
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When he meets his holiday romance at the same hotel from 20 years ago, a broke Greek waiter must help organize her wedding to one of the most wealthy and prominent men in the country. (For the YouTube livestream)

April 7, 2018
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When he meets his holiday romance at the same hotel from 20 years ago, a broke Greek waiter must help organize her wedding to one of the most wealthy and prominent men in the country.

February 27, 2018
(short film) When a Yemeni family loses their father in a drone strike during war, the youngest child takes over his business to sell all water bottles in order to pay for his badly-injured mothers operation.

November 13, 2017
When a hopeless romantic student meets his holiday romance in Hong Kong by accident, he takes her out to similar spots like 10 years ago, hoping to spark her interest again before he leaves in 12 hours. (short film)

October 12, 2017
A lovesick student turns down his dream-intership to travel to Hong Kong to meet his holiday romance, but after he loses his phone he has to figure out other ways of finding her within 12 hours before he flies back again. (Note: it’s a short film concept)

October 10, 2017
I have a simple question about one script I’m currently working on: it has 10 short stories all based in Greece in different cities and areas. Maybe you know the movies “New York, I love you” and “Paris, je t’aime”. Basically, it is such a script, but located in Greece. Do you think this type of script is marketable in any way? And should I write one logline for the whole script or 10 different ones for each story? Thank you for your help in advance! Savas

July 7, 2017
I thought about replacing the ‘Romeo and Juliet’ play with a self-written play. “When he meets an exchange student, a socially awkward nerd joins the university play to win the lead role and have his first kiss ever with his crush before she returns to her home country.”

July 5, 2017

Recent reviews

on After he sees his favorite world-famous musician at a concert, a failed writer meets her in his dreams, but he only has 6 hours before he wakes up to earn a kiss from her and convince her of him.

Love this angle, Odie. Thanks so much! Sorry for the late reply. I didn't see this notification before. I hope you're doing well, mate!
on In the aftermath of a school shooting, the perpetrator’s loner best friend becomes a romantically involved with a popular girl who was injured in the incident. Their relationship is put to the test when he is forced to testify at an inquest that he had foreknowledge of the tragedy.

Sounds interesting! I like your story idea.
on In the aftermath of a school shooting, the perpetrator’s loner best friend becomes a romantically involved with a popular girl who was injured in the incident. Their relationship is put to the test when he is forced to testify at an inquest that he had foreknowledge of the tragedy.

Interesting concept. Maybe he was also asked by his friend to participate, but refused because he was too scared. Either way, I like the story. You have something good here!
on When a lab accident makes him lose his sense of touch, a morally ambiguous top scientist must create a serum before he loses his other senses.

Agree with Mike. Working on a serum inside the lab all day is not going to be really interesting for an audience. You have to expand your story beyond that.
on When a series of unusual deaths occur in an uncharted region of Alaska, an aspiring detective must retain his lawful morality in a hidden barbaric world to seek those responsible.

You don't have to add a detailed description of the story below your logline. If we don't understand your premise based on your logline, your logline is not ready. Your logline has to stand on its own. Now to your…
on After an actual demon possesses his wife during rehearsals for a stage version of The Exorcist, a spineless director must fight his demonic spouse to save the cast and crew.

I like both loglines (Neer and dpg). Two totally different story directions though.
on One lonely Filipino seafarer in a cruise ship finds comfort to his roommate who saves money for his wedding but he unexpectedly falls for him, and as they sail together his feelings grow deeper until heâ€™s force to reveal it.

I can see a concept, but I can't see a logline with the needed elements. Discovering your own identity can be part of your characters dramatic need. But you want him to have some kind of visual goal as well…
on In a bid to keep his job, a commitment-phobic womanizer seduces his boss’s wholesome daughter, but when she genuinely falls for him, he must continue the charade.

Hey darkhorse, Sounds for me like a comedy concept. Like you said previously, it could be fun to watch as a sitcom. However, I agree with dpg and riechiev: him seducing his daughter seems more likely to upset the boss,…
on After his daughter who is a schoolteacher disappeared unexpectedly, a police officer has 3 hours to stop terrorists from blowing up the U.S. Capitol building.

What's the ultimate goal of your main character (police officer)? Rescuing his daughter? Stopping the terrorists? Rescuing himself after the robbery?
on two years after Selina was gone she meets Thomas again, who has to try everything to get her out of depression and win her heart

This is barely a coherent logline. Selina and Thomas tell us little about your lead characters. I would guess there are a few Thomas and Selinas out there in the world ;) So try describing your characters in a more…
on A traumatized ex-military professor must protect his students when he discovers that the dean and his colleagues are spies sent to eliminate him in a dangerous exercise of trust.

Confusing wording: Why does he have to protect his students when he's the one getting targeted? Also, protect is not strong enough imo. We want to know what he wants to do when he disvovers the truth about the dean…
on In the aftermath of a high school shooting, a young popular teacher blames himself for failing to prevent it.

Agree with Mike. The teacher blames himself for the shooting, but you want to picture a story in your logline, not just a scene or two. The main conflict of your protagonist, along with his goal (goal and main conflict…
on When a washed-up championship cowboy, reduced to shilling for a huge conglomerate, discovers its championship racehorse is being doped on drugs, he steals the horse to liberate it from commercial exploitation.

Unfortunately, I missed this post. But I'm happy reading it now. Like the premise and your logline pitches a great story. To be honest, I didn't know this movie. Not my times, but I will check it out. Thanks :)…
on A selfish drunkard is forced to run a startup and fight powerful government agencies after he inherits it from his righteous entrepreneur best friend who died mysteriously.

Some questions:Why is he forced to run the startup? Does he work for his friend before and take over the company after his friend dies? Why does he have to fight powerful government agencies as the leader of a startup? What's going…
on A selfish drunkard is forced to run a startup and fight powerful government agencies after he inherits it from his righteous entrepreneur best friend who died mysteriously.

Some questions:Why is he forced to run the startup? Does he work for his friend before and take over the company after his friend dies? Why does he have to fight powerful government agencies as the leader of a startup? What's going…
on An animal-hating animal control officer wakes up as a stray dog and must find a way to turn back but when he’s impounded and scheduled to be put down he instigates a jailbreak to save himself and the other end-of-lifers

Good version, Mike. The wording is on point and you have all important elements as well as the theme of your story summed up in your logline. You're intending to make a "family" script out of this logline, which I…
on When charismatic Russian politician Boris Nemtsov, is brutally murdered in Moscow, the American documentary filmmaker, is propelled on a dangerous search for the truth. Along the way she faces the toughest choice of her life – to betray Boris and herself by extorting the truth or go to the end no matter what.

Richiev wrote a good version. I agree that you should focus your "documentary" on the "disover the truth" part as your main goal, because your first version suggests "betraying Boris" which doesn't make sense for me, as the "truth" about…
on When a white supremacist cop is confronted by billboards calling out his chief’s neglect of a rape and murder case, he must silence the victim’s bitter mother and return peace to the town. ★ Accepted

Good version, Karel! I was just wondering if the logline wasn't told from the perspective of the mother (Frances McDormand)? I thought she was the protagonist.
on A sound effects man teams up with a cop has seven days to go after a murder suspect who killed a teenage girl who happens to be his daughter.

This is basically Taken with two protagonists teaming up to get the murder of a daughter.What does the profession "sound effecte" have to do with your story? Does it play a role in getting the suspect murder? I don't see…
on When Marcus Rosen is attacked by a unknown assailant, he awakens a hidden power that he eventually must use to stop evil from destroying humanity.

Cheers.Who is Marcus Rosen? I think that's the name of your protagonist, which is not necassary to state in a logline. Just use a description of your character, like student (Spider-Man) or businessman (Batman) and a flaw that suits best…