When a high school dance instructor is accused of molesting the principal?s son, a public dance carefully choreographed to expose the real perpetrator ? to everyone?s surprise, the school?s biggest donor ? inspires school officials to rename the school?s auditorium honoring the accused.

by Roberto Alto 671 pts

3 reviews

Foxtrot25 17,380 pts ★ Accepted

Robert,

Your logline presents a setup for a plot. It needs to illustrate a main character, an inciting incident, and what must be done before something happens to change an outcome forever.

I suggest that you check out the formula advice linked to this page.

Good luck

sloanpeterson Logliner · 691 pts

I think what the others are saying is to state what the hero must do and not what he ends up doing. ?This seems like a very odd movie plot to me though, to choreograph a dance rather than go to the police and even to watch a dance that might act out a molestation - it sounds too uncomfortable for me to want to tune in, much less pay money to see.

dpg 112,231 pts

Yes, check the advice under "Formula" at the top of the web page.

The logline contains 2 spoilers: ?It gives away the Big Reveal ("expose the real perpetrator ? to everyone?s surprise, the school?s biggest donor"); and it also gives away the denouement (" inspires school officials to rename the school?s auditorium honoring the accused").

A logline should never contain spoilers.