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When a Desert Merchant is tricked by the God of water and is detained to the Gods realm he must escape by using his charm and ability to sell.
Why have they been captured, and what must they do to escape. I feel you need to expand upon the action and event to create a fuller logline
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When Cara, a reclusive writer, befriends a woman who believes she’s the fictional character Jane Eyre, she finds a new sense of purpose in helping Jane navigate the complexities of modern life. When the writer’s estranged brother turns up with questions about their past, Cara must finally untangle her own truth from fiction.
Thanks for your feedback, very helpful.
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When the parents are detained by weather abroad, a man-child elder brother must take charge of his dysfunctional family’s Christmas customs and prove himself as an adult.
Very interesting premise!
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When a devoted bodyguard inherits his dead employer’s debts, he must fight a crooked businessman who was both a good friend and partner to the deceased to save his life and that of the daughter of the death boss, with whom his affair are becoming ever more prevalent.
Need to change the other deceased to either passed or died and not 2X.
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When her daughter is sent to hospital after being attacked, a mother tries to find the assailants regardless of the consequences.
A grieving mother(spy) goes all in after her innocent daughter is attacked for not wanting to join a local's gang, and this sends her on a John Wick, and Nobody Rampage until her job is complete.
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After his workaholic mom is send to work at their native island, Alex (11) will live his first summer at the gransparents village.
5 Stars Village
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A woman finds a phone connected to the future, she is tasked by people to do a series of increasingly extreme tasks in an attempt to fix their present, or it may be her latest bout of mental illness.
I love this - WILL MAKE AN AMAZING MOVIE!!!
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When failed Quarterback receives a demo tape from a failed songwriter his friends start dropping dead. Finding himself on a CIA hit list he Retreats into the Pocket, but finds Offense his only option. In striving to save his own world he may save it for all of us.
Failed 2 x. Use Ineffective, or unsuccessful, etc.
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Having the same name as a famous super-spy isn’t always easy for a 13-year old pursuing a normal childhood. But there are two things the school bullies don’t know about me: One – I am, in reality, the actual son of the iconic James Bond, and two – I’m anything but normal.
James Bond Jr. 008
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A desperate griffin fights through a horde of zombies to capture the only thing that will return his family?s honor, an immune human.
I could see this being made into a movie!
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When a peace-seeking alien crashes in remotest New Zealand, a feisty female scientist and a taciturn hunter must rescue him from a war-like Vietnam vet.
I think it is amazing!
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In a last-ditch attempt to find ‘the one’, a cynical single Mother sets out to find answers to The 36 Questions That Lead To Love, and an unlikely romance ensues.
Let's look at the basic logline formula and plug in your logline: (When [a major event happens], a(n) [flaw + main character] must ([overcome the flaw], and) [do/pursue the main action/goal]. "In a last-ditch attempt to find ‘the one’" [major…
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When a school child is killed in a botched kidnapping case, a young superhero decides to retire, but her long-lost nemesis reappears–an evil superhero who also happens to be her brother.
I can't seem to grasp what's at stake? How come he's evil?
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A man uses self hypnosis to travel back in time by uses a portrait of a pop singer who’s young enough to be his daughter to meet and fall in love with her.
Check the use of pronouns. On my first read, it sounded like this man wants to travel back in time so he can have sex with his daughter. Pretty sure that's NOT what you meant... Check grammar as well. The…
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A stubborn, inquisitive anthropologist believes an unidentified body found by the NYC police is a Neanderthal, but her investigation is quickly and ruthlessly suppressed by a secretive organization with links to the ultra-rich.
Great logline. But a couple of comments... Would like to know how the anthropologist is connected to the NYPD. Was she hired by? Is she working with an NYPD detective? Stubborn and inquisitive are good descriptors but don't seem to…
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When a future millionaire obsessed with time travel sets in motion his evil plan to achieve it, a high school boy with superpowers tries to stop the future catastrophe.
The logline is too general and thus implies a generic movie. We've seen this movie a hundred times before in a dozen different ways. Rich bad guy and a plucky resourceful teenager/secret agent/mother/robot/dog in conflict to save the world. What…
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A traditional fiddler crab breaks out of his shell and goes beyond the call of duty to dive into a global climate crisis to save his sister, their slice of the creek, and potentially the world.
I quite liked this logline. There is a cartoony nature about it. The use of "breaks out of his shell" offers the double meaning (figurative and literal) hinting to me that this will be a fun read and won't take…
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Madrid, the beginning of the seventies of the last century. A girl is born marked by a chilling, temporary possession of her mother. Madrid, at the beginning of the nineties, twenty years later, the same protagonist, turned into a medium, faces the spirit of her best friend.
There is a lot going on in your logline and wondering how you can make it more concise. Maybe something like this: Claudia Vázquez, a medium and parapsychologist, must find a way to defeat a demonic spirit that has haunted…
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Mystical demi-gods cruelly rule the land until a young child with supernatural powers defeats them one by one.
TBD :)
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A disgraced ex-cop, offered the chance to regain custody of his son must partner with a soon to retire ex-prosecutor to catch a serial killer before he kills more children, digging for the truth they unearth a hidden layer of personal and professional secrets of those involved from within and outside the law.
I like this logline a lot but seems it has several plots and not sure which one is the main one. Let's try simplifying it. A disgraced ex-cop [CHARACTTER], offered the chance to regain custody of his son must [ACTION/GOAL]…
