Your body is the asset, Social class is the Pyramid Scheme. California is the Guinea Pig & Chance is the Prodigal Son.

6 reviews

Richiev Singularity · 82,714 pts

"When California bases it's citizenship status on body type, an overweight teen rally's the socially awkward and the homely to bring the ugly stick down on the states Tyrannical system."

CraigDGriffiths Singularity · 20,463 pts

Wow the readers body is the asset. I am in your script?

No?

Be specific, it is your friend.

When a person social status is based on body a (insert protagonist) must (goal) but (obstacles).

Obvious.

Neer Shelter Singularity · 55,464 pts

Agreed with DPG.

This logline is confusing as the plot is unclear.

Think of a logline as a simple statement of the major plot points and elements in a story:

Story element 1 - main character, who is the one person that will be taking the main action in the story to achieve a goal?

First major plot point - inciting incident, what in your story forces the main character to take action in the first place?

Story element 2 - obstacle, what stands in the way of the main character achieving his or her goal?

Second major plot point - what is the goal the main character will achieve by the end of the story?