Neer Shelter

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After an actual demon possesses his wife during rehearsals for a stage version of The Exorcist, a spineless director must fight his demonic spouse to save the cast and crew.

June 29, 2020
When a machete-wielding crew chases a young gang member, he?s forced to drive incognito with a Hassidic geriatric to complete a drug run.

February 24, 2020
After a machete wielding gang murder his partner, a vengeful drug mule hides with a geriatric cripple in his station wagon, to chase and kill the psychotic crew.

February 20, 2020
A question about The Departed and Donnie Brasco

November 8, 2019
After three friends gain super-powers from a crashed alien ship, two of them must stop the third from destroying the city.

August 7, 2018
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After his prizefighter abandons him, an oldfashioned trainer takes on a stubborn woman to train her for a championship challenge.

July 26, 2018
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After an attempt on his father’s life, a by-the-book Marine captain must kill his father’s rivals and become head of his own crime family to protect those he loves.

July 16, 2017
Dear fellow writers, I wanted to share with you the good news about the release of my latest little project – a comedy web series titled God’s 17. You can check out our latest episode on our website: www.gods17.com

May 29, 2017
After his pregnant wife’s cancer medication gets pulled from the public health system, a hot-headed Aboriginal amateur boxer must steal enough to keep her alive until the birth.

July 21, 2016
After his terminally ill and clinically dead bitch of a wife miraculously revives her self, a depressed man must find a way to free himself of his life long commitment.

July 18, 2016
After her arranged husband separates her from her piano, a mute pianist must earn her piano back one key at a time by giving lessons to the man who bought it and who secretly loves her.

May 14, 2016
After the king asks him to serve as his advisor, the lord of the North discovers the murder plot of his predecessor as an attempt to cover up the heir’s illegitimate claim to the throne.

April 24, 2016
After a neurotic accountant tells a failing Broadway producer he can scam investors with a flop. He searches for the worst script and worst director to stage a play with the hopes it closes on its opening week, only to discover a hit. The Producers

November 15, 2015
After his father goes to jail a naive television executive deliberately produces the worst possible shows in order to drop the ratings and prevent his father’s network from being taken over, but the shows he produces become a huge success and he is made to continue making them.

October 11, 2015
After a big CEO threatens to convert their inherited community TV station into a home shopping channel. Two brothers must find the worst talent to produce the worst shows in order to make the CEO lose interest and give them back their station to uphold their dying father's wish.

May 18, 2015
When an out of work teacher is given a deadline by a loan shark, he contracts a hit-man on himself so his family can collect on his life insurance. However after he befriends the hit-man they decide to fake his death instead.

September 7, 2014
When a highly-strung accountant inherits a failing community TV station, he finds unlikely performance geniuses at a small town talent competition to save the station.

August 27, 2014
When a naively sentimental clown doctor is approached by an 8 year old cancer patient in the hospital a bond is made and he must find a way to make the boy smile and learn to not get attached himself.

August 22, 2014
When an unorthodox AFP detective, with a confrontational personality, uncovers an operation of a Mexican drug cartel in Australia. He must now stop a one ton inbound shipment of heroin with the help of an uptight FBI agent after the same gang.

August 9, 2014
After his aunt dies, a notoriously obnoxious lawyer will inherit 100 million dollars on the condition that he gets 5000 new friends on facebook within a week without using a computer. Or loose the money to a rival lawyer in charge of her estate.

August 9, 2014

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on When a sentient video game character falls in love with the real-life player, she must get rid of the other characters to gain the player’s affections, even if that means rewriting the game script.

This is cool! It's like a reveres Her, where the AI is the main character - It's a digi-girl meets boy love story. The premise needs more clarity though. What kind of game? First-person shooter? Battle royal? A quest? Lastly,…
on A righteous but gullible whistle-blower must obtain evidence her intimidating boss is a murderous monster before he catches on and takes sadistic steps to silence her for good.

I can only assume that she MUST obtain evidence now that he killed someone close to her... This is your inciting event, and it needs to be front and center in the logline - start with that. Secondly, what's the…
on After an actual demon possesses his wife during rehearsals for a stage version of The Exorcist, a spineless director must fight his demonic spouse to save the cast and crew.

Thanks Savino.
on After an actual demon possesses his wife during rehearsals for a stage version of The Exorcist, a spineless director must fight his demonic spouse to save the cast and crew.

Great suggestion, thanks for that. I was going for a coward needing to overcome his fears, but the theological angle could work too.
on After an actual demon possesses his wife during rehearsals for a stage version of The Exorcist, a spineless director must fight his demonic spouse to save the cast and crew.

This is a logline for a mockumentary (fake documentary) I'm currently writing - it's aimed at being a contained horror-comedy.
on In the depths of the depression, a small time con artist teams up with a seasoned pro to con $500,000 from a ruthless mobster to avenge the mobster’s murder of his mentor.

A great example, I'd make the wording a bit more "active sounding". For example: After a ruthless mobster kills his mentor, a small-time con artist takes revenge by teaming up with a seasoned pro to get half a million out…
on When evidence surfaces that an earlier generation of rebellious replicants has reproduced, a compliant next generation blade runner must find and ‘retire’ the child whose existence threatens human domination.

In order to not rely on the previous IP, this could also work: When a rebellious humanoid replicant gives birth, a genetics law enforcer must “retire” the child whose existence threatens humanity.
on In a post-civilization future, when an old project of reintroducing the human species on Earth is activated, a young 2.0 lonely human travels across the world, to be with others like him, just to end up disappointed with the new civilization being developed.

There are too many threads to this narrative for the logline to make sense. Describe one major event that motivates the human 2.0 to take action in pursuit of one clear goal.? Also, no need to name the character. Check…
on On a post-apocalyptic Earth with one side continually facing the sun, a gritty outsider and the metaphysical representation of his soul are forced into facing a new tyrannical regime that threatens the last remains of humanity.

Arguably, so are all the other survivors. What is it specifically about this dude that makes his struggle against the regime interesting, or rather more interesting than anyone else's?
on An? wheelchair-bound college girl must use her physical abilities and mental acumen to save her trapped friends from zombies who have surrounded their cottage.

It's a zombie flick with a twist - the main character is wheelchair-bound. As the genre is well established and chock full of tropes, the trick is to find an appropriate twist - a wheelchair may be enough, but it's…
on When a suicidal FBI agent is assigned to infiltrate a prison drug ring, his life is saved by two lifers and a bond forms, however, his new friendships soon thwart his mission.

The way in which the friendships thwart the mission is missing. What happens that stops him? Also, what specifically is the goal of the infiltration?? Better yet, who is the big bad guy or gal that he wants to put…
on When a young homeless woman is confronted by an evil older male blackmailer, who holds the key to her secret, she must choose between her dignity and a roof over her head. (this is for a scene, but I’m requested to submit a logline for it).

Stop posting multiple loglines - only one a day. Review at least two other users' loglines for each one of yours. Comply with our community guidelines ('START HERE' tab in the bar above) or risk being banned from the site.
on A man blackmails a young woman he?ll inform the shelter and care program about her ongoing drug habit, leaving her homeless, unless she becomes his mistress.

Stop posting multiple loglines - only one a day. Review at least two other users' loglines for each one of yours. Comply with our community guidelines ('START HERE' tab in the bar above) or risk being banned from the site.
on Losing his eyesight gradually due to a rare disease, an introverted painter hurries to finish his last painting to participate in an important exhibition going trough an existential crisis.

This is a really nice premise.So we get the stakes, could you make the exhibition something specific? Like a major biennale for example.The only other note I'll make is that it's not cinematic. Nice premise but ultimately, some guy painting…
on After accidentally landing in North Korea with a paraglider, a rich South Korean heiress with the help of a North Korean military officer has to find a way out of the country without getting arrested and killed. -Crash landing on you (2019) -37 words ★ Accepted

This sounds like an interesting film - I will try to find it. Thanks! About the logline I would change it so: After air currents crash a wealthy South Korean paraglider in North Korea,? she must collaborate with an army…
on After being built as a cyborg by a fellow vampire, a young woman must race against time to kill vampires who tries to invade her town so that she can be human again.

Maybe I'm missing something but this logline is confusing. If I work hard at it, this is what I was able to glean: MC - young woman. Inciting event - being turned into a cyborg. Goal - become human again.…
on Chris and his team plan to renovate a community of vacant row houses. After forcing a squatter out of one of the homes, they soon realize the neighborhood has a very dark history.

A logline's primary function is to describe a plot. A plot is a sequence of events connected via cause and effect. In this logline, there seems to be a disconnect between what's happening and what the characters do. Describe the…
on “After a series of bizarre events erupt across the globe, a self-sabotaging math genius is forced, along with a team of hand-picked misfits, to? maintain a bug ridden simulation, namely, life as we know it.” Title: ‘Revelations’ – 1 Hour Scifi TV Pilot

This is a bit wordy and lacks a clear cause and effect relationship. "...a series of bizarre events..." is too vague, what one event spurs him or her to take action? How will the MC being a self-sabotaging math genius…
on A Lieutenant in a drug gang, misreads a situation killing his boss. This sparks an internal war eventually leading to the destruction of his gang, his death and the loss of their terroritary.

Have you considered changing the concept slightly? What if another lieutenant kills the boss, and he stands to take the blame. This way, his vie for power could become a means of survival rather than a murderous rampage for the…
on A talented lonely man falls in love with his soulmate but everyday fighting brings out her past and his imaginary future.

Your explanations of the plot aren't describing the specifics a logline needs. In short, all you need to know if a story has the fundamental components to function well are a main character (man), an inciting event (missing), and a…