CraigDGriffiths

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Called to a disturbance a cop discovers a murder and everything points to his daughter. He calls upon favours, legal and illegal to hide the truth

July 5, 2023
A woman tries to engage with her dysfunctional biological family after she learns that her late loving and caring mother abducted her as a baby.

October 3, 2022
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Seeing his wife’s ghost each morning for breakfast a man becomes vigilante after the police decide to stop investigating her murder.

May 1, 2022
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A woman finds a phone connected to the future, she is tasked by people to do a series of increasingly extreme tasks in an attempt to fix their present, or it may be her latest bout of mental illness.

April 7, 2022
A disenfranchised (unstable) taxi driver seeks violent justice for passengers he feels have been wronged. He is pursued by a detective who is willing to cross the line to bring him to justice.

December 20, 2020
After a long career, a retired sheriff in the old west is forced to defend himself against war crime allegations from the civil war. Dividing the town and discrediting his legacy.

October 2, 2020
A christian struggles with his fate when his new neighbours are satanists, this is how he discovers he is actually the devil himself. “668 the neighbour of the beast”

August 29, 2020
Missing – A broken undercover cop and rookie detective are transferred into missing persons. During investigating a missing woman they discover links to one of his old undercover cases and a cover up by his former handler.

July 2, 2020
A Lieutenant in a drug gang, misreads a situation killing his boss. This sparks an internal war eventually leading to the destruction of his gang, his death and the loss of their terroritary.

April 24, 2020
1960 (USA) Two criminals parked roadside, one black, one white, they wait for money to be picked up, but a battle of wits breaks out resulting in one being shot and the money disappearing.

March 22, 2020
A man with multiple personality disorder is being held captive by a murderous cult or his own personalities. He must rescue a girl who may or may not exist and escape.

January 28, 2020
Home

October 25, 2019
Animal activists do a night raid on a facility only to discover human not animal unwilling test subjects. They are now trapped with a security force willing to kill them to protect the secret.

September 28, 2019
In 24 hours she is forced into increasingly degrading and dangerous situations to save her loser boyfriend from a situation of his making only to realise she is better off with a broken heart than with a loser she loves.

August 29, 2019
1950, blackmail and threats of outing a closeted gay detective when he is tasked with ?investigating the murder of his lover that appear to have been committed during a gay encounter.

August 22, 2019
In a dystopian right wing world. A terrorist group is planting boxes holding either cash or explosives, opening it makes you rich or dead. A poor man and his friend find one and try to figure out what to do.

June 14, 2019
After discovering his travelling companion has a bag of cash a man starts a conversation hoping to blackmail him. When that fails he threatens violence that escalates into murder.

May 12, 2019
Trapped in an abandon house by a storm two gangsters engage in a battle of wits and violence try to ensure their own safety regardless of whose side arrives first.

April 30, 2019
A young psychic lives a virtual hermit?s life until he sees his own death, he must try to figure out the events that lead to his death in a hope of preventing them.

February 17, 2019
A group is held by a madman who is killing them one by one until they identify the traitors securing their freedom.

January 6, 2019

Recent reviews

on Called to a disturbance a cop discovers a murder and everything points to his daughter. He calls upon favours, legal and illegal to hide the truth

Thanks. The story is more about him desperately trying to save his daughter. He has no consideration for his police career or oath. She is a drug addict and this is the body of her dealer boyfriend. He threw her…
on A woman tries to engage with her dysfunctional biological family after she learns that her late loving and caring mother abducted her as a baby.

Here is the story, so far. A woman is raised by a single mum that had a really great job. Paid for a private school, a really nice middle class life. The woman has never felt anything but loved. She…
on A woman tries to engage with her dysfunctional biological family after she learns that her late loving and caring mother abducted her as a baby.

With the revelation that her late mother abducted her, a woman struggles to connect with her dysfunctional biological family hoping to get assistance with her medical issues.
on Seeing his wife’s ghost each morning for breakfast a man becomes vigilante after the police decide to stop investigating her murder.

sorry for the autocorrect issues. Unsure should be unseen.
on Seeing his wife’s ghost each morning for breakfast a man becomes vigilante after the police decide to stop investigating her murder.

Here is the short pitch. Each morning he has breakfast with his wife’s ghost (he knows it is a grief hallucination). He meets a woman and that is in the early stages of a romance. The cops come and tell…
on Seeing his wife’s ghost each morning for breakfast a man becomes vigilante after the police decide to stop investigating her murder.

So true. Thanks.
on When fantasy characters invade the big city’s system, a frustrated dreamer must deal his imaginary robot girlfriend came to life, but when she remembers being someone who was kidnapped years ago by the head of organized crime, they must team up to unravel the mysteries of the other characters past lifes by using brute force and a two-faced mask to cover their insecurities.

We have all heard the expression “Less is more” well the reverse is also true “More is Less”. The more you pile on the less visible the story becomes. What I am seeing is a huge amount of plot. But…
on A priest kidnaps an atheist writer and tortures him until he believes in God or one of them dies in the process.

Your story can (and should) have heaps of twists and turns. But a logline should give a clear pitch of the story. People assume Logline X 100 complex things equals movie. So logline confused by too much X 100 equal…
on Maximus comes back to life as his body is ignited on the funeral pyre, sparking an escape and betrayal rife with visions of heaven and hell which condemn him back to the coliseum.

What is his aim. What are the goals of the story. What may stop him? Just a general observation. A lot of your loglines are pretty but lack any story. Don’t believe the idea that a logline has to be…
on A woman finds a phone connected to the future, she is tasked by people to do a series of increasingly extreme tasks in an attempt to fix their present, or it may be her latest bout of mental illness.

Yeah. I think it is a “bridge to far” moment. It is like when you see a logline, “a man desperate to reunite with his estranged daughter after he find he has cancer, while saving the world from aliens” (Aliens…
on A priest kidnaps an atheist writer and tortures him until he believes in God or one of them dies in the process.

A priest kidnaps an atheist writer and tortures him in an attempt to make him believe in god. the last little bit feels like a bridge to far. This is enough of a story for me. Adding the extra muddies…
on When the leader of the Assassination Cartel’s grandson is killed during a raid authorized by the American President, the semi-retired leader invokes an ancient vengeance that will wipe out the president’s seed from the earth

I agree with Rich. The other thing the story is a bit vague. Of course there is revenge. But if you are going to tell us, give us some detail. "..it triggers an ancient form of retribution that makes him…
on A disenfranchised (unstable) taxi driver seeks violent justice for passengers he feels have been wronged. He is pursued by a detective who is willing to cross the line to bring him to justice.

Nice. It may end up that way. The cat and mouse would imply that he is doing things to outsmart the police. I think of it (so far in my head) as two stories. Both heading for the same outcome…
on A disenfranchised (unstable) taxi driver seeks violent justice for passengers he feels have been wronged. He is pursued by a detective who is willing to cross the line to bring him to justice.

Hi Richiev, I am thinking an indie thriller. I would be aming for an almost horror feel. Still formulating an arc. Or in this case I think it is intertwining arcs. I would imagine the driver starts out doing something…
on The U.S. govt., along with Nasa, devise a plot to relocate people of color to inhabit the moon; against their will!

You can’t give too much info away. You just can’t. It is impossible. Because you and I could start with the same logline and within a day our stories would be completely different. You need to tell the story through…
on Convinced by prominent comedians that marriage will make him funnier, a struggling comic takes their joke seriously and elopes only to find his bride wants a marriage so peaceful that in order to find the comedy in it, he’ll have to up his game.

There is a lot of setup, as others have pointed out. You have boiled the entire movie into a few words. He’ll have to up his game. As in? Become a complete bastard? Become the world’s best husband?
on To relive his childhood, a mentally ill writer decided to bring his 1950s sitcom to life by pitching it his script to executives.

Tell us the effect he is hoping to achieve? Relive his past by having a show made don’t really connect. The story isn’t hanging together.
on A civilian operative writes an AI app that guarantees facial recognition. The app also turns the phone in your pocket into a targeting sensor. Is he willing to kill to protect us all from social media?

We are lost in Act1. A man searches for the person trying to kill him. That is what we have in story. Everything else is decoration. What is the story about?
on After their parents and stepparents passed away, seven siblings must separate differences and work as a family together

A goal is the bare minimum. The shortest logline I ever heard that won a competition was “A man clones his wife so he can fall in love with her again” Raise questions. Not really complete. But a clear goal.
on After a long career, a retired sheriff in the old west is forced to defend himself against war crime allegations from the civil war. Dividing the town and discrediting his legacy.

The reason is it triggers a story, it is not the story. We could make him a royalist in Ireland or a Germany after WW2 now living in France. Is a person their worst action or a total of all…