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"When her male colleagues wager on her best friend?s chastity, a woman remains silent; when the bet ends in rape, she seeks redemption through vengeance."
The wager is not the inciting incident. The inciting incident, the event which propels the story is the rape. ?Describe her, what is her personality? And what does she need redemption from? Describe the specific way she seeks vengeance. Does she use a knife to slowly mutilate each of the them before killing them? Does she know martial arts? It almost reminds me of Kill Bill.
Example:?When her best friend is raped because of a bet, a woman seeks vengeance against the men who made the bet. (21)
>>>she seeks to drive him suicidally insane.?
Why doesn't she just plot his death?
OR: what is the emotional truth in the moment after the rapist beats the rap? ?What is the emotional truth in the heart of the protagonist?
What is the emotional truth in the heart of the audience as they witness such an outrageous injustice?
"A woman seeks justice for her friend who commits suicide after being raped; when the billionaire goes scot-free, she seeks to drive him suicidally insane."
When I read the logline I get no visual image, I can't imagine what the action of the movie is going to be. It doesn't have to be extremely descriptive, but there needs to be a visual description that allows anyone who reads the logline to be able to develop some sort of mental image of your idea.