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What the others wrote.
I'll add that the logline needs to describe a starting and ending point, in other words inciting incident and goal.
As Richiev wrote, describe his goal in detail. However, also describe? what motivated him to achieve this goal. In this case what specific event motivated him to HAVE to change his life?
As the others have said. ?The story seems to be driving the Driver rather than the Driver driving the story.
If this Locke I see it as something different
A man desperate to do the right thing, drives to birth of his illegitimate child, ringing everyone in his life trying to explain his actions.