zla28

Penpusher · 36 points

264 points to Logliner

on ‘When a mentally ill patient refuses to leave his home, a probationary constable discovers her training could never prepare her for the deadly lesson she?s about to face.’

Your first log line is too vague on the action. Your updated log line is better. ?The reason why, because your action is clearer on how the main ?character will try to deal with the event