In the chaotic, deadly days after Pearl Harbor, the War Dept. seeks technically skilled and experienced divers to help with recovery of ships and personnel. Two Chief Divers are called forth, both with intimate knowledge of their ship and crew, the USS Arizona.

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Neer Shelter Singularity · 55,464 pts

This is a statement, not a plot description. Who is the main character? What is their goal? And what is their motivation?

Foxtrot25 Summitry · 17,380 pts

This should begin with "Two chief divers are called forth to..."

csantan2 Logliner · 381 pts

Still need a conflict...a goal...something. Given the previous thought that most of the people who would connect to the event naturally, what are you providing in this story to hook a new generation?