Inspired by actual events, a Chicago man from a tough Chicago neighbor joins the Armed Forces, landing on D-Day +5, surviving the savagery of the Battle of Bastogne and guarding one of the Nazi’s Luftwaffe Commander, Herman Goering at Nuremburg.

5 reviews

Neer Shelter Singularity · 55,464 pts

Agreed with csantan2, the logline lacks a clear goal. It could be that he wants to survive but it's not clear what specifically is threatening him.

Otherwise, this vaguely describes a situation, not a plot. Best to redraft this one so it specifies an inciting incident and causally connected goal.

csantan2 Logliner · 381 pts

What's the character's goal?

Foxtrot25 Summitry · 17,380 pts

You are telling us what they did, not what we can see them do if we go on the story of your film.