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Former lovers Jane and Sarah risk their physical safety to fulfill their dream of publicly performing a dance which includes a nearly impossible lift that was banned 30 years ago due to the ?dangerous lifestyle? it promoted.

March 10, 2014
When a prominent Savannah, Georgia citizen is accused of murdering his male lover, a rude New York reporter must find out what really happened by interviewing the local residents who would prefer to hide the truth under a fa?ade of money, booze, and lovely manners.

March 4, 2014
Mystic River tells the story of three men whose dark, interwoven history forces them to come to terms with a brutal murder on the mean streets of Boston.

February 14, 2014
When his lover is murdered during their routine work on a land deal, attorney and legal historian Charles Aden must penetrate a centuries old legal quagmire of lies and betrayal to bring her modern day killer to justice.

January 30, 2014
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When her husband dies, Jenny must block the unbearable pain of losing the man she loved with increasingly risky sexual adventures with a womanizer she hates.

July 20, 2013
A disillusioned real estate developer vows to protect the residents of Almiiitey who believe they will be saved from his company?s plans for their future by a spirit from their past.

May 20, 2013
A murdered chess champion challenges heaven to save her brother from becoming her killer?s next victim.

May 20, 2013
A murdered teenage girl sacrifices eternal life so she can return as a ghost to protect her younger sister from being her murderer?s next victim.

April 28, 2013
A teenage girl sacrifices eternal life so she can return as a ghost to protect her younger sister from being her murderer?s next victim.

April 28, 2013
When a highly respectable real estate attorney stumbles on the bullet-ridden body of a client, he must investigate his own firm to uncover their involvement in the murder.

January 13, 2013
When a 50-foot moose goes on a rampage, a commitment-phobic biologist must infiltrate the genetics lab run by his former lover to uncover the secret to destroy the creature.

January 13, 2013
When a 50-foot-tall Maine moose destroys forests and attacks people, biologist Dan Gellerston must confront dark secrets from his past to find a way to stop the monster.

January 6, 2013
When a lumber baron?s greed-driven experiments in tree growth acceleration unintentionally create colossal moose, he summons John Bear, biologist, to destroy the creatures before their house-crushing size and insatiable hunger cause massive devastation.

September 24, 2012
Title: Moose Crossing Logline: While investigating allegations of massive deforestation, John Bear, journalist, discovers a wealthy land owners? greed-driven attempt to speed up tree growth has accidentally created a new species–super-moose with an insatiable hunger for trees.

July 31, 2012
When Charles Aden, hotshot real estate attorney, is sent by his development firm to investigate the disappearance of Sam Carey, a key player in a lucrative real estate deal, it is business as usual. But when Charles discovers Sam?s dead, frozen body along with disturbing evidence that ties his firm to the murder, he realizes that his assignment is anything but routine. Charles Aden hunts a big city killer who hides his crimes in the snow-covered secrets of Almiiitey?Maine?s smallest small town.

July 30, 2012
Title: Almiiitey, Maine Logline: A big city killer hides his crimes in the snow-covered secrets of Almiiitey, Maine's smallest small town.

July 22, 2012

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on Henry (a golf course ball picker) is a young man with a history of being unable to assimilate into normal society. With his best friend Bally, a talking golf ball, attempts from co-workers to help him leads to a series of ensuing chaos.

Hi Donn Curbow. Got it. His goal is to win the golf tournament so he can have a better life. You describe this as a revengeful goal--who is the person or persons he will get revenge against if he wins…
on Henry (a golf course ball picker) is a young man with a history of being unable to assimilate into normal society. With his best friend Bally, a talking golf ball, attempts from co-workers to help him leads to a series of ensuing chaos.

Hi Donna Curbow. I have enjoyed reading your comments. What is the most important thing your main character wants to accomplish in this story?
on When an assassin, who can control the actions of others, discovers his recent missions were actually un-sanctioned hits, he must now hunt down his mysterious employers who have now made him their top target.

It does. Thanks.
on When an assassin, who can control the actions of others, discovers his recent missions were actually un-sanctioned hits, he must now hunt down his mysterious employers who have now made him their top target.

Hi Knightrider1984. Please define extraggation. A Google search of the word was not very helpful. The stakes are clear in your logline--the psy-assassin's life is at stake in a world where anyone could be the killer. It wasn't clear what…
on When three Cambridge students discover they've stolen the hope diamond and sold it to a French businessman while being high, they travel to Paris to steal it back before exhibition day.

What are the stakes for the students if they don't get the diamond back?
on While an elderly woman lies in a comatose state, God grants her a second chance at redemption, for triggering world war 3 in her youth.

Thanks, Christopher, for the additional information. Did she intentionally cause World War 3?
on When two trains collide in her small western town, a brave young woman takes charge ? and in the process meets a man who could change her life forever.

Dear Jean-Marie Mazaleyrat, Checking in to see if I have the irony of the story correctly identified--your main character physically frees people from a train wreck and, in the process, she meets the man who frees her from the psychological…
on While an elderly woman lies in a comatose state, God grants her a second chance at redemption, for triggering world war 3 in her youth.

Hi Christopher Hart, The stakes are clear in your logline. What did the woman do to place her soul in jeopardy? How does the coma influence what happens in your story? Looking forward to learning more.
on Former lovers Jane and Sarah risk their physical safety to fulfill their dream of publicly performing a dance which includes a nearly impossible lift that was banned 30 years ago due to the ?dangerous lifestyle? it promoted.

Great to hear you have firsthand experience with the country in the film--lucky. The scenery is such a critical element of this film, especially when it is contrasted with Ennis succession of desperately dingy apartments and the brittle glitter of…
on Former lovers Jane and Sarah risk their physical safety to fulfill their dream of publicly performing a dance which includes a nearly impossible lift that was banned 30 years ago due to the ?dangerous lifestyle? it promoted.

Truly inspiring comments dpg. Many thanks.
on Former lovers Jane and Sarah risk their physical safety to fulfill their dream of publicly performing a dance which includes a nearly impossible lift that was banned 30 years ago due to the ?dangerous lifestyle? it promoted.

Dear dpg, Thanks for your feedback.
on Former lovers Jane and Sarah risk their physical safety to fulfill their dream of publicly performing a dance which includes a nearly impossible lift that was banned 30 years ago due to the ?dangerous lifestyle? it promoted.

Yes, I agree the complications of the two women doing the dance after all these years will create many ripples in their other relationships that present obstacles the two have to overcome that will help them reconnect. I was thinking…
on Former lovers Jane and Sarah risk their physical safety to fulfill their dream of publicly performing a dance which includes a nearly impossible lift that was banned 30 years ago due to the ?dangerous lifestyle? it promoted.

Dear dpg, Had not considered having them perform the dance at the college reunion--had just thought about them meeting there after 30 years--interesting idea I will explore in the writing. Thanks dpg and Richiev for the nudge in that direction.…
on Former lovers Jane and Sarah risk their physical safety to fulfill their dream of publicly performing a dance which includes a nearly impossible lift that was banned 30 years ago due to the ?dangerous lifestyle? it promoted.

Thanks Richiev for logline revision suggestion--it pushes the story into areas I had not considered. I had intended to contrast the discrimination the two women faced 30 years ago with the present which is hopefully a bit more enlightened. If…
on Former lovers Jane and Sarah risk their physical safety to fulfill their dream of publicly performing a dance which includes a nearly impossible lift that was banned 30 years ago due to the ?dangerous lifestyle? it promoted.

Richiev, a college class reunion causes them to get back together. In classic romance style, they realize they have "unfinished business" and want to find a way to reunite. The twist is they are bi-sexual and both have been very…
on Former lovers Jane and Sarah risk their physical safety to fulfill their dream of publicly performing a dance which includes a nearly impossible lift that was banned 30 years ago due to the ?dangerous lifestyle? it promoted.

Hi dpg, Yes, their age is part of the risk--they were 20 when they met and in peak physical training. They are now 50 and have not trained in many years. To correct the injustice of not being able to…
on Former lovers Jane and Sarah risk their physical safety to fulfill their dream of publicly performing a dance which includes a nearly impossible lift that was banned 30 years ago due to the ?dangerous lifestyle? it promoted.

Hi Richiev, The lift is the most physically dangerous part of the dance but is not in and of itself Prohibidado. The dance was banned because it portrayed two women dancing together romantically and was considered to promote an unnatural,…
on After he?s ordered to destroy a building with civilians inside, a jingoistic drone operator uses a demolition robot to fight his superior officer and allow the civis to escape.

First try at tweak (39 words): After he?s ordered to destroy a building with civilians inside, a drone operator realizes the government he once revered is corrupt and that he must use his drone equipment to defeat his superior officer…
on After he?s ordered to destroy a building with civilians inside, a jingoistic drone operator uses a demolition robot to fight his superior officer and allow the civis to escape.

That explains why the civilians can't leave. Why does the building have to be demolished? What will happen if it isn't?
on After he?s ordered to destroy a building with civilians inside, a jingoistic drone operator uses a demolition robot to fight his superior officer and allow the civis to escape.

What will happen if the building is allowed to collapse on its own? Why can't the children leave? Apologies for pestering you for details. I try to restrict questions to those that might impact logline suggestions.