When three Cambridge students discover they've stolen the hope diamond and sold it to a French businessman while being high, they travel to Paris to steal it back before exhibition day.

Hi Adele93

I like your story!

Maybe you can suggest the romance by qualifiying your french businessman (single, handsome,...) or via an other way.

I prefer this writing:
"When three students realize they?ve stolen a 25-million diamond and sold it to a French businessman after a wild University party, they must steal it back before the exhibition day to avoid emprisonment."

What about this one: "After a wild university party, three students realize they've stolen a 25-million diamond and sold it to a French businessman. To avoid imprisonment they must steal it back before the exhibition day. "

Thanks for your reaction, Richiev!

"Dude, where's my car" reminds me of "Hangover"

While in those two stories the characters don't know WHERE something is, in my story they do, they just have to get it back... and it's not that easy :)

The characters are going to be a bit odd, yes, I mean, it's funny to see how three different personalities will react to the situation.

The logline presents a very "Dude, Where's my car?" feel. Is your story going to have a bunch of oddball characters?

or what about this: "After a wild university party, three students realize they've stolen the Hope Diamond and sold it to a French businessman. To avoid imprisonment they must steal it back before the exhibition day."

Well, those are no kids anymore, they are university students... :)

The lesson is as simple as it can be: 'Don't do drugs, it will get you in deep trouble. Stay out of it."

There are four characters: three students and the French businessman.

The three students have different personalities, the one will learn to stop posting everything on twitter, the other will become a normal guy and stop smoking weed, the third one will find her love... But the lesson is that all of them will never ever use drugs again... Drugs=trouble, they have experienced it...

The French businessman is also a main character, he'll fall in love with one of the students, not knowing her real intention.... At the end he'll understand love is more important than money.

Adele93:
Of all the 10,010,001 stupid things college kids are capable of doing while intoxicated, why did YOU, as the author, choose this one? What's YOUR point? What theme are YOU exploring?

What is subjective need these students have? When all is said and done, is there a lesson they will have learned? IOW: what is their character arc?

Yes, exactly :) They have done something stupid while being intoxicated, that's the inciting incident,

So the inciting incident is a random act of meaningless stupidity?

Or maybe "Keep calm and get the hope" (you know, those crown images...)

Hey Jean-Marie! Thanks for your reaction and for your logline suggestions, I really like them!

About the title: indeed, I also thought about changing the title... What do you think about "Hopeless in Paris" (the Hope Diamond...) Because the point is... when they finally get the diamond (Midpoint), they are clumsy and stupid enough to lose it...

Moreover, there is also romance in the air... The French businessman is a young, beausitful guy searching for real love, because he thinks everyone wants him for his money...

Thanks for your comments!

When three Cambridge students realize they stole the Hope Diamond and sold it to a French businessman while being pissed, they must steal it back urgently to avoid a lot of hassles??

Hi Adele93

"When three Cambridge students realize they stole the Hope Diamond and sold it to a French businessman while being pissed, they must steal it back to avoid a lot of hassles..."

Maybe your title could be more ironic and related to your logline (a good logline + a killer title = the best hook)

"Short Break In Paris" "Break Fast In Paris" ... (if this means something in English, of course)

I think this could be a good comedy in the vein of The Pink Panther.

What about this one?

"When three Cambridge students realize they stole the hope diamond while being intoxicated and sold it to a French businessman, they must steal it back to avoid imprisonment."

Hey dpg, thanks for your reaction,

Well, weird things can happen when you smoke weed (or get drunk), that's what happens with these students.
Of course they were high when they did it.

By discovering I mean that when they did it, they weren't conscious of what they were doing...

And about the motive, I don't think that when you're stoned/high you need a motive to do something (not that I know how it feels...) they just did it because it was 'funny' at that particular moment...

Then, in the morning, the principal, who first discovered the diamond was missing and who has seen the security camera footage, calls them to have a very serious conversation... "What have you done with this goddamn diamond? Where is it?" ...

Does that make any sense? :D It's a comedy script :)

The logline is puzzling. How is possible for someone to "discover" they've stolen something? Isn't theft an act of conscious intentionality, not discovery? Were they "high" when they stole it? What was their motive for stealing it, stone sober or stoned?

hey almiiitey, thanks for your reaction!

the hope diamond belongs to Smothsonian Institute... In my story, the University of Cambridge lend it out for exhibition (in the Ruskin Gallery). The principal is the first to discover the theft. He wants to keep it secret, because the University was responsible for the diamond...

If they don't get the diamond, they'll be 1. dismissed 2. going to jail (I mean, 300 million dollar is not a joke) 3. can you imagine the fine the Univesity will have to pay?

So, it's between the principal and the three clumsy students...

What are the stakes for the students if they don't get the diamond back?