When a teenage girl is refused by her school girlfriends for still being a virgin, she decides to commit suicide when a sex offender kidnaps her.

5 reviews

Neer Shelter Singularity · 55,464 pts

The stakes don't stack up.

School yard popularity ?v serial rape ???!!!!?You just can't compare the two.

According to your description the plot should really be about her survival and helping the other prisoners, the backstory shouldn't even be mentioned in the logline. Description of her school friends, or lack thereof, should be delegated to the synopsis.

Here is an example of a logline with your subject matter and character:
After a depressed teen is kidnapped by a serial rapist, she must lead all the other victims out of their prison to safety.

Neer Shelter Singularity · 55,464 pts

This is very confusing.

Forget logline and genre, what does the girl want and why?

Perhaps if you list these things we may be able to?help you put together a logline.

Richiev Singularity · 82,714 pts

I am not sure what you mean when you say, she is 'refused' by her school girlfriends'

I would try a different word, maybe shunned might fit better.