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This logline presents a scenario with three protagonists in three story threads running in tandem.? The standard logline formula doesn't apply.
What is needed is a logline that ties the story threads together, a unifying theme, dramatic problem, objective goal.? Right now, I don't see what the unifying factor is other than that they all worked at the same place -- but that only applies to the 1st Act.? After that, the characters and their action lines seem to scatter to the wind.
What is the unifying? factor that ties story threads together for the rest of the film?
In its current form this logline lacks most of its necessary components, so it's hard to make any useful suggestions at this stage.
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It's fairly SOP in drama that characters have to confront their futures as well as their past.? What's so different about that confrontation in this story? IOW:? what's the story hook?