When a timeworn pro-wrestler is demoted to a developmental program, he begins an affair with his boss?s daughter to salvage his otherwise flourishing career.

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dizzo1014 Penpusher · 241 pts

Hello,

Thanks for sharing?? Your logline confuses me.? How can the wrestler have a flourishing career if he was demoted and timeworn?

dpg Singularity · 112,231 pts

As Nir Shelter said.

Given that wrestling is a rigged ?game, more spectacle ?than sport, I don't see how deliberately having an affair with the boss's daughter improves his prospects. ?The logline needs to cover the contingency that the boss would disapprove of the affair which would only make the wrestler's predicament worse.

For that matter, what is the boss boss of? The wrestling federation?

Neer Shelter Singularity · 55,464 pts

The concept in this logline isn't clear.

What is a timeworn pro-wrestler? I'm not clear on that description, is there a better one you can use for the main character?

It is also un clear what a developmental program is and who would demote the wrestler to it?

What specifically is his goal? How will he salvage his career?

The connection between his demotion and him starting an affair is tenuous, one?does not?motivate him to do the other.