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Samurai · 1,561 points

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A bereaved father and assassin descends into delirium as he murders a group of anonymous teenage boys one by one for the Mexican cartel, unaware the final target is his long thought dead son.

August 3, 2019
A contract killer takes his teenage brother on job hunting down a group of anonymous gangbangers for a Mexican drug cartel to deter the wannabe-thug from a harrowing life of crime.

August 11, 2018
When a short-tempered U.S. Marshal with a longstanding grudge against sex offenders humiliates his spiteful new boss, he reluctantly agrees to protect a sadistic child molester standing trial in a hostile family suburb to save his illustrious career.

February 12, 2018
The harsh realities of the Wild West challenges a New York marshal’s stoicism when he searches for a fugitive he must capture alive to earn a spot in the Secret Service.

February 5, 2018
Granted one week to hunt down the true assassin, a lovesick hitman must execute his fiance on day seven when she unwittingly poisons his boss, the kingpin of crime.

February 4, 2017
A plucky archaeologist and his meddlesome team must search a brittle primordial underground temple for escape when an excavation mishap destroys the entrance and awakens a man-eating Yeti.

January 23, 2017
When hunting season nears for the 20th time in his career, a miserable assassin enrolls in his pregnant wife?s yoga and pilates class to rediscover a desire to kill.

November 25, 2016
When the wildest gunslinger in the west is wanted dead, an underemployed ranch-hand sets out to capture him alive for the biggest cash reward.

September 27, 2016
When his daughter’s rape-homicide case turns cold, a child psychologist gradually befriends a rehabbing pedophile (the prime suspect) to solicit his trust and a confession.

September 9, 2016
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When his wife dies giving birth to her rapist?s child, a recovering alcoholic chooses to raise the baby alone to resolve his scorn.

September 4, 2016

on When a short-tempered U.S. Marshal with a longstanding grudge against sex offenders humiliates his spiteful new boss, he reluctantly agrees to protect a sadistic child molester standing trial in a hostile family suburb to save his illustrious career.

I've actually committed to a different version of the story after extensive rewrites of the original logline which was initially a Western about a reluctant US Marshal from New York sent to capture a murderous pedophile alive. The journey of…
on After uncovering a false flag terror plot, a na?ve but ambitious reporter risks her life and the lives of her colleagues to unmask the conspirators before they topple the US government for the story of a lifetime.

Hey Bilmore,What exactly does the MC do to try and stop these terrorists that endangers innocent lives and her own; what's her main course of action? She's an "ambitious reporter", so does she travel to dangerous enemy territory undercover and…
on When her older sister disappears with a mysterious stranger, a loner teen and her newly sober mother embark on a precarious road trip to find her.

Hey tomasina,dpg touched on the older sister "disappearing"; as already suggested, clarify that further: did this ?young lady elope with this stranger or was she kidnapped by him?And, this is just a suggestion, consider reversing the roles for the sisters.…
on Granted one week to hunt down the true assassin, a lovesick hitman must execute his fiance on day seven when she unwittingly poisons his boss, the kingpin of crime.

There's additional consequences to the story, specifically the day seven part, ?that I've included in other versions of this. But I felt it may be too third Act-ish and irrelevant to the main idea presented here.?
on Two dim-witted best friends battle the internet and their conservative town to keep their porn shop open.

Hi CLSmith, Your idea has a lot of potential. The logline itself has room for improvement though. An inciting incident appears to be missing. You already have two ideal obstacles in the way of your MCs. What?exactly?do those forces do?that…
on A spy with a big mouth must destroy an enemy radar station before more planes are shot down.

Hi mop1011, As Richiev pointed out, the inciting incident is missing. Why must this big mouthed spy destroy an enemy radar station before more planes are shot down? What happens to make the MC take this course of action? And…
on When an elder crime boss sits down with a younger crime boss, at a poker game, he must carefully find a way to avoid a gang war and keep everyone at the game calm.

Hey Nwales06, Consider making the poker game the inciting incident - and I feel like it's meant ?to be exactly that; perhaps tempers explode at this game anyway, and from there you have a plot:?When? all ?hell breaks loose at…
on When his daughter’s rape-homicide case turns cold, a child psychologist gradually befriends a rehabbing pedophile (the prime suspect) to solicit his trust and a confession.

Edit - When his daughter?s rape-homicide case turns cold, a child psychologist gradually befriends a rehabbing pedophile (the prime suspect) to solicit his trust--then a confession. A minor edit towards the end there, but I thought it may add some…
on After a member of the Gonzo Girls unexpectedly dies; Santana, Veronica, Shoshana, and Olympia must stop the advertisers from cancelling their show on the fledgling pop-culture network by Sweeps Week.

Hey ComplexMuse, For now, make one of those characters the MC. So, you have the inciting incident; a Gonzo Girls member dies, so your chosen MC must stop the group's sponsor from cancelling their biggest show--there, the main course of…
on After being abandoned by his wife, a middle aged British man relocates to Bangkok and works as a teacher; this move gives him many hilarious experiences.

Hi NaiBKK, You have your inciting incident, your MC, and his main course of action. But, as Richiev asked, what is standing in his way? This is where an antagonist of some sort should come into play. Plus, consider setting…

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