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As the others have mentioned, the story isn't clear.
Who specifically does what and why?
>>>learn the hard way
Loglines are not about lessons learned.? Loglines are about the action a protagonist takes to achieve a specific objective goal.
Who is the protagonist?
What is his or her objective goal?
(If you have not already done so, please review the? guidelines under "Our formula" at the top of the page for constructing an industry standard logline.)
Who is the antagonist and what is his motive?