Oskar, an overlooked and bullied boy, finds love and revenge through Eli, a beautiful but peculiar girl.

Again, put these in classics. And overlooked? By who and for what? Also for something like this I wouldn't include character names unless it is a true story or a famous character, such as a comic book adaption.

Again, put these in classics. And overlooked? By who and for what? Also for something like this I wouldn't include character names unless it is a true story or a famous character, such as a comic book adaption.

Webdoitlive;

FYI, ?the preferred practice is to post loglines for movies already made under "Classics".

And again, this is more of a blurb than a logline. ?Two different promotional techniques targeting two different markets.

Agreed with the above comments.

Also no need for the character's name in a logline unless it's a historical or biopic.

Check out the Training tab on the top bar, there's more useful information there about logline best practice.

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"Oskar, an overlooked and bullied boy, finds love and revenge through Eli, a beautiful but peculiar girl."

Hi wedoitlive,

Your MC's main course of action should be clear; what exactly does he do by finding love and revenge through this peculiar girl?

And an inciting incident appears to be missing. So, he's "bullied"; there must be a key setup you might've left out wherein some bully goes way too far and the MC decides enough is enough and takes action.