Haunted by his past, a careworn man fights against starvation and a hostile environment to find a new home for a little girl and himself in a post apocalyptic world, which not only questions his purpose in life, but if hope alone can keep you and the “Mensch” inside you alive.

Better.

But...

"Careworn" seems extraneous.? He's a survivor in? a post apocalyptic world -- it goes without saying he's "careworn".? (Who in that world isn't?)

And what's the story hook?? What differentiates this from other films about post apocalyptic odysseys?? What unique twist do you have, what new thematic territory does your story cover that hasn't already been covered in films like "Cargo" and "The Road"?

Better.

But...

"Careworn" seems extraneous.? He's a survivor in? a post apocalyptic world -- it goes without saying he's "careworn".? (Who in that world isn't?)

And what's the story hook?? What differentiates this from other films about post apocalyptic odysseys?? What unique twist do you have, what new thematic territory does your story cover that hasn't already been covered in films like "Cargo" and "The Road"?

Agree with? the points? Nicholas Andrew Hall and Nir Shelter raised.

The original version buries information about the setting that is needed? for a logline reader to make sense of the story.? It takes 30 words to find out that the setting is a post-apocalyptic world.? The logline should lead off with the setting.