After the Grim Reaper has guided countless people to the Afterlife, a suitable replacement must don the cowl, so Death can finally rest in peace.

(working title)

7 reviews

CraigDGriffiths 20,463 pts ★ Accepted

This is a good setting but it doesn't describe the story conflicts.

Is the new person happy about the job?
Does he have to die?
Does the GR want to retire?

All that can and must be in the story. Not your story, but here is an example

"The Grim Reaper must convince a father to leaves his family and become the reaper's replacement"

Lucius Paisley 426 pts

If you get stuck, I suggest looking into Terry Pratchett's Reaper Man as?another approach.

dpg 112,231 pts

Or the Grim Reaper and St. Peter could switch jobs.

(And why not play it for comedy instead of drama?)

tradingdavid 186 pts

This feels like a common concept so it needs some sort of twist.

Like the only eligible person is a professional skeptic.

Andrew Bates 270 pts

Thank you all for the helpful feedback.
I noticed no I.I after I posted the Logline.

The Protagonist is = Death
Antagonist is = Time

Here is an update
"After a mass shooting the Grim Reaper decides to hang up the cowl, he must convince an ill man to be his replacement so Death can find peace"

Still needs work, but thank-you for pointing me in the right direction

dpg 112,231 pts

Who is the protagonist -- the Grim Guy or an unnamed entity who must find a replacement?? What's the inciting incident - - what sets up the need to replace him now?? What's at stake if no replacement is found?

As written, there's raw material for a skeleton of a sketch, but it needs to be fleshed out.

fwiw