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Pretty much rephrasing what Nir said lol:
While it sounds like you have an interesting story in mind, don?t forget, that loglines are a very specific tool, for a few specific purposes. Are you sure you studied the formula Karel Segers has prepared?
When this happens, this person has to do that (to achieve and or avoid this pr that).
Kinda. Very basically. Also important to pick one main character.
Much like your other post, this lacks the necessary elements to describe a plot.
In short, you need a main character who is motivated by an out of the ordinary inciting event to achieve a goal. Check out the 'Formula' tab on the top bar for more details.
Who is the main character in your story the woman, her son or the grandmother? What does the main character want to achieve and why?