A contract killer takes his teenage brother on job hunting down a group of anonymous gangbangers for a Mexican drug cartel to deter the wannabe-thug from a harrowing life of crime.

A contract killer drags his teenage brother on the job, hunting down a group of anonymous gangbangers for a Mexican drug cartel to deter the wannabe-thug from a harrowing life of crime.

5 reviews

dpg Singularity · 112,231 pts

When his kid brother starts dealing drugs, a hit man tries to scare him straight by taking him on his latest job, to kill a notorious cartel leader.
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It? translates "start a life of crime" into something more specific and relevant to the hit man's next target for termination. ? And it's more logical and higher stakes:? If someone is desperate enough to lay out a lot of cash for a hit man, it would be too take out the leader at the top of the supply and command chain, a? menacing rival, not some secondary nuisance or trouble maker.? Of course, the hit man will have to go through gangbangers, button men et al to get to the cartel leader.

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Neer Shelter Singularity · 55,464 pts

It reads like the punishment parents used to give their kids who tried smoking cigarettes - made them smoke a whole pack to disgust and deter them from doing it again.

The only problem is, hunting people (gangsters or not) is not an innocuous activity. Being disgusted by cigarettes won't make you a smoker but killing people will make you a killer - a life of crime or not he made his brother cross a line he can never uncross.

Richiev Singularity · 82,714 pts

"Worried his kid brother's going to drop out of college and start a life of crime, A contract killer decides to scare him straight, by taking his wayward sibling?on his latest hit."