When Superpowered Nelly discovers that her mother is not really death, but a lie implanted in her head, she goes on a crazy journey to discover the truth, but her evil father has other plans for her.

Hi Birdman, I agree with the others:

• Superpowered - are we in a superpower world or is this power a result of some part of the story?
• A crazy journey - this could mean anything. ?What is she searching for? ?Her mother? ?The truth about what specifically?
• Her evil father feels quite comic book - that may be the feel you're going for, but the father needs more motivation than just being evil - he's the hero in his own story.

As Nir Shelter said.

And the villain always "has other plans".? No headline news there.? A villain wouldn't be a villain if he didn't have "other plans".

The question the logline needs to answer is:? what, specifically, are those "other plans"? What is the speciifc threat, or obstacle the father poses?

There's no need for the character's name in a logline, instead, let the descriptions introduce her.

Do you mean 'dead' instead of "...death..."?

Writing "...goes on a crazy journey..." doesn't enlighten the reader. In a way, all heroes go on crazy journies, what about this one makes the experience different and original?

Much in the same way, her evil father and his plans are vague descriptions. Describe what it is that makes him and or his plans evil.

My point is, you need to describe specific details that illustrate a journey that's unique to your character.

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