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This is very vague, even if it was a logline for a short film or scene tell the story. Why would he have to make the choice? What does the girl have to do with the lighter and why is he using his lighter? If it's windy outside, what is the relation to the lighter?inside? It's all very disconnected.
This is very vague, even if it was a logline for a short film or scene tell the story. Why would he have to make the choice? What does the girl have to do with the lighter and why is he using his lighter? If it's windy outside, what is the relation to the lighter?inside? It's all very disconnected.
>>Oh, it?s lit!
But this site is dedicated to loglines for movies.