When a grieving medic with deadly powers resists induction into the horsemen of the apocalypse, she must battle the remaining three in order to save the world.

The logline is almost camp as it is. Assuming that this is not meant to be a spoof, more clarity is needed here. A "grieving medic" is an interesting character to start with. Saying she has "deadly powers" is too vague. Some readers will lose interest just there. Then going on about the "horsemen of the apocalypse" brings the whole thing down to apparent silliness. As there is no clear connection between someone who is suffering the very personal experience that is grieving and a sweeping mystical battle that will shake the world.

A more focused rendition would be: "A doctor, now depressed over discovering she has a lethal touch, withdraws to a country retreat. A dark horsman arrives at her doorstep, proclaiming that she must ride with him. But she refuses to begin the end of the world."

Steven Fernandez (Judge)

Yeah, I think Lachlan's structure for the logline works really well...

Hey Nicholas. That's great, then, and I congratulate you because I think that's the best concept I've read about on this site and one of the coolest stories I've heard about in ages. However you decide to run with the logline, I think you're onto a winner, script-wise.

A quick suggestion to get your mind working on a logline that gets it all across without becoming too wordy: "A grieving medic with deadly powers must battle three superpowered fundamentalists who believe themselves - and her - to be the Four Horsemen of the Apocalypse." This kind of configuration doesn't explicitly mention that the world is at stake so might not work for you, but if you trust your reader to know that the coming of the Four Horseman signals the end of the world, the stakes are at least implicitly there. Depends how overt you want to be. Anyway, best of luck with it. I think this is a script that absolutely deserves to be written.