debbiemoon

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Two teens on a police ride-along uncover a web of corruption, drugs and murder beneath the surface of their quiet Texas town – and must recover the evidence gathered by one teen's father, a cop murdered by his brother officers, if they're to survive the night…

December 19, 2012
Two teens on a police ride-along for very different reasons discover a web of corruption, drugs and murder under the surface of their quiet Texas town…

December 18, 2012
A naive young intelligence analyst is sent undercover in a group of rogue CIA agents – but as he falls for the glamor of their high-octane lifestyle, he starts to question who the real bad guys are…

December 3, 2012

on When an extremely devoted woman learns of her husband's infidelity from a neighbor, she becomes devastated and determines to make confirmations, terminate the marriage and take from him what he cherishes most – their kids.

Okay, "woman divorces her husband" doesn't seem like a big enough issue to pin a whole movie around to me - but would I be correct in guessing that TX comes from a country or culture where it *is* a…
on When a devoted woman suspects infidelity in her husband, her investigations leads her to discover unforgiving facts about him which may force her to take an irrational decision with daring consequences.

Okay, this is a bit vague, isn't it? It's only to flicking back to the earlier version that I have any idea what this is about (taking the kids). (That's assuming it still is, of course.) It's surprisingly easy to…
on China uses sunlight to stay in totalitarian power, but when a naive scientist discovers how to usurp their control, she's targeted by every national power there is.

I like it. I'm assuming it's an 'Enemy Of The State' -style chase thriller? If we're going to be picky, you could try something simpler than "stay in totalitarian power" - "dominate the world", or similar?
on After losing their home, a penniless couple launch a clever scheme to become permanent residents at a hotel while evading the staff.

Ah, *now* I understand this story! I think clinging to the phrase 'become permanent residents' is doing you no favours, though. It sounds more like they're concocting a legal deal than performing a con trick. Something more along the lines…
on A man?s wife is murdered while investigating undead shadow people, leading him to delve into the nature of these creatures.

Could be interesting; feels a little vague at the moment. What does 'delve into the nature of' actually mean? Is he going to avenge his wife, strike a deal to bring her back to life, find out that she was…
on A modern day story of Oscar and his loser friends, who stand between him and the woman of his dreams.

The problem here is that the logline is vague to the point of saying nothing much. Is this a comedy, a tragedy, a farce? Does he end up with the woman, or choose the friends over her? Why do they…
on An ancient vampire re-awakens on a remote Irish island. An addicted American doctor must struggle with his own demons before confronting this evil.

As above, what's the connection between the addiction and the vamp - specfically, why does it make the doctor the best *and the worst* person to tackle the vamp? Yeah, I get the drug addiction = blood addiction thing, but…
on Being forbidden to love maakes managing the world's perception of love easy. But when Rose experiences love for himself he puts his job and existence at stake.

First things first: Rose tends to be a female name. I'm still not sure whether this particular 'Rose' is male, or whether I'm not understanding the logline... Is this detail really worth confusing everyone over? Okay, so no one is…
on Through proving himself innocent of his father's death, the monk Alyosha realizes his guilt as nurtured by Father Matthias, the renowned priest and Alyosha's dark mentor.

Okay: did he murder his father or not? Because this logline leaves me unsure about that: and I mean confused-unsure, not intrigued-and-want-to-know-more-unsure. Is this a contemporary story? What country is it happening in? What genre is it? Could be anything…
on A computer hacking team has found themselves in a race against time to erase their digital fingerprints after attracting the attention of the secret service.

That's fine, but surely that's business as usual for a team of hackers? What are the stakes here? Why tell the story of this hack and no any other? Why are they in particular danger this time? Most importantly, what's…