The reckless son of a marijuana grower falls in love with the naive daughter of the local sheriff who is determined to eradicate marijuana cultivation in this modern retelling of Romeo and Juliet.

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4 reviews

Tony Edward Samurai · 1,450 pts

Great points by dpg there -- if it was set in the, say, early sixties it could work well.

Man... I'm living in the wrong country,

Best of luck with it.

dpg Singularity · 112,231 pts

If the story is set in the present and in the US of A, I suggest meth rather than marijuana. Marijuana is s-o-o last century as a contraband drug; states are decriminalizing it and using it as a source of sorely needed tax revenue. Even the federales (DEA) are looking the other way, redeploying limited resources to other drugs.

Richiev Singularity · 82,714 pts

I like the premise but the logline feels more like an explanation of the story than it does a logline.

In a logline you have a main character, a goal and something that stands in the way of that goal. In your logline the only character you have given a goal to is the sheriff.

I would reword this logine so that your main character is the one who has the goal.

So solid premise, logline could use a little work

Hope that helped, good luck with this!