Tony Edward

Samurai · 1,450 points

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A mild-mannered but disgruntled teller leads a hostage revolt against his captors during a bank siege in order to get away with the stolen loot for himself.

June 1, 2018
Trapped in an all-night bank siege, a by-the-book bank teller must outwit both cops and robbers to escape with 100k from the bank?s vault to pay-off his brothers gambling debt.

January 29, 2016
A reticent young mother, grieving the death of her husband on 9 11 joins three widows who take on the U.S. government, looking for answers to the century?s most heinous crime

January 25, 2015
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After finding fame with a stolen screenplay of a recently deceased unsigned screenwriter a movie studio’s script reader turns to murdering his backlog of budding screenwriters for their movie ideas.

July 24, 2014
After inheriting his Uncles’s dairy farm in remote Chechnya, a Harvard Business School drop-out finds himself at war with the Chechen Mafia over his Uncle’s backdoor drugs and prostitution racket .?

January 8, 2014
After learning she has inherited her famous poker champion Father?s debt to the Mafia, a straight laced school teacher sets out to become the world?s first female world series of poker champion.

October 2, 2013
When a senior member of a prestigious University is accused of sexual misconduct, the head of the Economics department must defend his long-time mentor, the Dean, who is accused of complicity by ignorance.

August 25, 2013
With the help of a mysterious new friend a recently widowed Father must traverse to a sinister world of dark magic to rescue his daughter from an all powerful queen.

June 13, 2013
A self-centered play critic struggles to re-build his life when a scathing review he writes drives a playwright to suicide, by becoming a playwright himself.

May 5, 2013
Unable to pay the court costs to his recent divorce, an aging bank teller takes on a gang of ruthless thieves for their score when he is caught as a hostage during a bank heist.

April 27, 2013
After convincing his reformed felon brother to hold up the bank where the map to a lost goldmine is stored, a disenchanted insurance salesman must finish the job himself when his brother is shot dead by the obstinate bank manager during the heist

April 23, 2013
When his brother is shot dead during a botched bank robbery to re-claim their family inheritance, a disenchanted book keeper must face a suspicious and obstinate Bank Manager, the cops, and his fear of public speaking to finish the job.

April 19, 2013
When troubled teen takes control of a crashed alien craft, he decides to fly it to London to prevent his girlfriend from cheating on him. With a secret government agency and a massing alien army in hot pursuit, he must choose between saving his relationship and saving the world.

April 17, 2013
After finding her teenage son in bed with the town scamp, an overprotective mother hires a prostitute to pose as a student at her sons High School in an effort to lure him away from his budding new romance. But when the son falls for the alluring money hungry prostitute things quickly spiral out of control.

April 17, 2013
After discovering the last of his estranged Father’s inheritance is locked in a neighbors safe deposit box, Chris, a shy and awkward out of work accountant convinces his felon Brother to break into the bank where it’s locked. When his brother is shot during the Heist, he is faced with the choice to either play hostage, or to finish the job himself.

April 16, 2013

Recent reviews

on An arrogant tattoo artist sets off on a cross country journey to track his missing girlfriend only to unravel memories he is refusing to acknowledge.

For me - the profession is neither here nor there-- the issue is in the vagueness of the complication -- "...only to unravel memories he is refusing to acknowledge...". Without this being specified I don't really know what this is…
on Crashed on a faraway planet with retrograde amnesia, a young, ingenious but highly schizophrenic astronaut strives to rebuild her spacecraft while endeavoring to outwit a manipulative, shape-shifting alien whose sole impetus is to repopulate by abusing her as a host.

I kinda like the concept -- has touches of Alien/ The Thing/ Invasion of the body snatches/ even Contact (even Moon..)... Agree with the above that there are some logical issues and perhaps a bit too much going on (at…
on A mild-mannered but disgruntled teller leads a hostage revolt against his captors during a bank siege in order to get away with the stolen loot for himself.

A re-working of an old idea.
on A clever teenager hacks a military computer to play a nuclear war game only to trigger the computer into preparing to “play” a real nuclear war.

Prefer dpg's. Whilst following conventional logline form (formula tab..) is great for those new to the logline game, it can dance dangerously close to conformity and hence a one way ticket to snoresville. Yes, loglines need to be clear and…
on Desperate to repair and reunite his dysfunctional family, an idealistic young man brings them to an abandoned island mansion in an attempt to relive his nostalgic childhood vacations, only to discover it overrun by giant carnivorous slugs. (HORROR-COMEDY)

Cool. Pretty much ticks most boxes. My only issue is that id hope his family are bunch of aholes, as who else is going to be fodder for these monsterous slugs in da house? Good luck.
on When a redneck American world champion woodchopper is defeated by the ultimate bogan Australian newcomer, he travels to the land down under to face his nemesis and reclaim the title.

Sane=same
on When a redneck American world champion woodchopper is defeated by the ultimate bogan Australian newcomer, he travels to the land down under to face his nemesis and reclaim the title.

I also think this has a lot of promise. My only issue is that both protag and antag are the sane type of character (for non aussies, 'bogan' is australian slang for redneck..).. just an idea, but what if the…
on A man is held by unseen captives that thwart his every escape attempt. He discovers that they are his other personalities that have trying to stop his most violent personality escaping and killing again.

I'm not sold on the whole multiple personality thing (very reminiscent of Donald Kaufman's screenplay 'The Three' in Adaptation... in the film this pitch was supposed to be a joke because of both its cliche and unbelievability...) I think if…
on Share your thoughts or advice on this logline: Faced with bankruptcy, a down-on-luck man goes through a spine-chilling experience to get money to pay for his son?s emergency operation.

We need to know specifically what the spine-chilling experience is...
on A Shakespearian actor becomes unable to tell reality from a play. When his character Mercutio dies he wanders through what he believes is the afterlife distressing his family and friends. Title : A grave man

"Do you have any tips on how to do this? Like a rule or something that could be useful to keep in mind?" I'm probably just doubling up on what Nir and others have said, but: Specifically define the OBJECTIVE…
on A young Thomas Edison must win the top invention prize at the Worlds Fair to prove to his dream girl and her disapproving father that he is worthy before she marries a wealthy suitor.

Heya, A very lively bunch of comments here... Just my two cents -- my first thought when reading the logline was of "Shakespeare In Love" - Not based on any real historical info.. BUT... The hook here is that the…
on When a commando is waken from a coma, he learns that he’s mostly machine and his kids have been kidnapped by a powerful warlord.

You have described the inciting incident only -- we need to know what the commando has to do in regards to this inciting incident... It reads as a very short unsatisfying film atm... Commando wakes from coma... "What?! I'm half…
on When she arrives at a trading post, her missing husband makes her very popular with the local marshalls

Agree with Richiev.You have given us a set-up (but no story...) -- and a pretty confusing one at that (how can her husband be missing, yet still be able to 'make her popular with the local Marshals...'? ..and what does…
on [Revisedx2] For refusing to buy more catnip, a vengeful cat calls upon the dark arts to end an insensitive mother’s career.

...or here is a take with the focus on the Girl as the Protag (a bit long in the word-count...): 'A lonely young girl learns spell weaving from her magical cat in order to curse her career obsessed mother with…
on A rebellious teen?s family goes missing. During her search for them, she uncovers a government conspiracy to end all religion.

We need to know what the ?teen plans on doing about the conspiracy (and why it would personally involve her at all..?) -- there are no logical?or personal?stakes here at all.
on [Revisedx2] For refusing to buy more catnip, a vengeful cat calls upon the dark arts to end an insensitive mother’s career.

... but -- the logical question I have after spelling out your plot points is ?-- if the cat has magical abilities, why does she (the cat) require the help of a human to perform the curse..?
on [Revisedx2] For refusing to buy more catnip, a vengeful cat calls upon the dark arts to end an insensitive mother’s career.

Hi, I agree with what's already been stated above -- but with short films (as this one seems to be being 8 pages in length...) I think some logline rules can be fudged here and there, depending on the concept…
on An aging radical’s suicide reunites seven of his college cohorts to mourn and reflect on the gap between their youthful ideals and their middle-aged conformity.

It makes me want to watch it again. A great example of a logline for an ensemble.
on When an alien satellite causes all of Earth’s transmissions suddenly stop, a retired physicist must find a way to bring them back.

Personal stakes seem pretty low...
on Presumed killed during a fierce storm, an astronaut left on Mars must survive with meager resources and no communication with earth until the next mission to the planet — in 4 years.

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