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Five adults is too many main characters, even for an ensemble, in a? logline for a spec script.? ? Better to narrow it down to 3 max.? Better yet, narrow it down to 1, formulate the logline with one designated protagonist,the alpha character who? influenced the others -- as supporting characters -- to? participate in the false charge.
>>>why should we pull for the lead character to succeed
In a horror flick do we always have to be pulling for the lead character, the protagonist.? Horror stories often entail the notion of dramatic retribution, unpoetic justice --? what the protagonist has coming to him because of his character flaw, because of his dramatic sins.? Can we be pulling for him to get the justice he richly deserves -- but has been able to avoid?? IOW:? horror as a tragedy.
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There is a lot of backstory in your logline...
Who is the lead character and what must the lead character do to stop the vengeful spirit of the babysitter?
(On a side note, why should we pull for the lead character to succeed since the lead falsely accused the babysitter of abuse?)