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Logliner · 415 points

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The global rise of demonic possessions brings together five exorcists from different faiths to combat an evil unlike any they have ever encountered.

March 16, 2023
“A heartbroken kitten learns about survival, love, loss and forgiveness during his relentless journey to find a new home after being abandoned one cold December morning.”

October 17, 2022
Misopedist Captain James Hook must confront his tortured past when he is forced to rescue a group of children held hostage by the demon boy, Peter Pan.

April 11, 2021
“Armed with nothing but her sex toys, a brash courtesan trapped inside a brothel must fight off her horny client and his creepy friends when she discovers they are actually bloodthirsty vampires.”

April 11, 2021
“A guilt-ridden hunter must protect his family from a murderous gang when he accidentally kills their leader’s daughter.”

April 9, 2020
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“Five college friends must fight off a man-eating mermaid when their party-barge stalls in the middle of a lake.”

March 29, 2020
“To rescue his parents and save humanity, Renaissance artist Leonardo Da Vinci must destroy an intergalactic megalomaniac’s alien armada with his unproven inventions.”

June 11, 2018
?Massachusetts, 1692: The leader of a coven must convince a Puritan minister to work with her to find and stop a powerful and cunning excommunicated sorceress whom she suspects is secretly behind the Salem Witch Trials.?

April 28, 2018
“Five adults must face their past sins when they are forced to deal with the vengeful spirit of a recently deceased woman whom they falsely accused of abuse when she babysat them seventeen years ago.?

April 28, 2018
?When an outspoken minister offends a pagan tribe, he and his missionaries are forced prove the power of their religion by spending twenty four hours deep within a cursed area of the tribe?s forest where no one has ever lasted past the night!?

April 27, 2018
?An advanced alien race threatens to enslave Earth in the 1500?s and humanity?s last hope lies in the unproven inventions of an Italian Renaissance artist who holds a dark secret.?

April 24, 2018

Recent reviews

on An anthology of eleven short stories about people discovering love and romance in the Big Apple.

I do agree that, based on the logline, it is kind of difficult to say anything else other than the fact that they are love stories. What makes them special or unique from the other love stories? It would be…
on Misopedist Captain James Hook must confront his tortured past when he is forced to rescue a group of children held hostage by the demon boy, Peter Pan.

Thanks, Richiev! I thought it would be a nice spin to have Captain Hook be the "hero" and Peter Pan (and Tinkerbell) be the villain for a change. In this story, Captain Hook was actually a "Lost Boy" who barely…
on On the verge of madness, a grieving man attacks his stubborn stepchild, chasing him onto private property, but when the psychotic landowner captures them he must learn to accept and work together with the boy to escape before they are both killed.

I assume the grieving man's madness is due to the fact he has to care for his stepchild? Here is another version of the logline you may want to consider: "A quick-tempered man and his stubborn stepchild must set aside…
on ?Massachusetts, 1692: The leader of a coven must convince a Puritan minister to work with her to find and stop a powerful and cunning excommunicated sorceress whom she suspects is secretly behind the Salem Witch Trials.?

Side note: As I was doing some research, I found that not all the Puritans were for the Salem witch trials and there were a few religious and political figures who voiced their displeasure and I found at least one…
on After a drunken hookup at a work party, an ad-exec realizes that he is in love with his ?work wife.? He must decide whether to profess his feelings or keep their relationship as is before she moves out of state with her boyfriend.

I would like to know why it's so important for him to confess his feelings toward his work wife? Is the ad exec married? Is he not happy with his marriage? If he is, what is it about his work…
on A blacklisted 50s American screenwriter sets out to write the perfect script to win back his job, but an alien fungus slowly dissolves his ability to tell fact from fiction.

I kind of agree with what the others said. Depending on the reason he was blacklisted, he may not be able to get his job back even if he had the "perfect script" (like the other reviewer already mentioned), assuming…
on Offered a drug at a high end party, a woman?s eyes slowly open to another dimension, she seeks remedy as she desperately attempts to reclaim her own sanity.

I do see a lot of potential here. This other dimension offers a lot of possibilities. Maybe it would be too much for this logline, but I would assume she would want to find the one who gave her this…
on The paranormal cases led a spiritual scientist to a mysterious world – a place where Vietnamese folklores collide and reveal a terrible curse between the Dragon and Fairy families, where she will finally find her destiny.

This does sound like an interesting story.? I see it more as a fantasy rather than horror (which is the genre you put it in). The logline is a tad long and there is information that we really don't need.…
on ?An advanced alien race threatens to enslave Earth in the 1500?s and humanity?s last hope lies in the unproven inventions of an Italian Renaissance artist who holds a dark secret.?

As a side note, more than one people whom I showed this logline to said this storyline reminds them a lot like the movie "Cowboys and Aliens". Not sure if that's good or bad.
on ?An advanced alien race threatens to enslave Earth in the 1500?s and humanity?s last hope lies in the unproven inventions of an Italian Renaissance artist who holds a dark secret.?

For what it's worth, Da Vinci's name is in the title of the script. Although I went back and forth a few times, the working title for now is "Da Vinci and his Weapons of War".
on A Jamaican virus infects a small town and only a bunch of stoners can save their family and friends from becoming zombies by rounding them up and getting them high.

The logline kind of reads more like a comedy (or comedy-horror). Even though this could work as an ensemble piece, it would be nice to see a main protagonist. The question I have is, so we know that getting high…
on An undercover policewoman lures a member of the Albanian mafia into a sexual relationship, in order to infiltrate and expose his gang’s cocaine trafficking.

Not a bad logline. The "who" and "goal" are clear. Even though the obstacles are implied, it would be nice to know more about the stakes. Maybe consider something like: "An undercover policewoman lures an Albanian mafia member into a…
on A sheriff is visited by Federal agents who are hunting an alien that has crashed in the hills ? an alien that can shape shift into any form. One by one people disappear and he must find and kill the creature to save his town.

Logline is a little too wordy and some of the information is unnecessary You could try something like: "A local sheriff teams up with two federal agents to track down a shape-shifting alien responsible for the disappearance of several members…