FAKING THE BAND After concocting a scheme to achieve popularity and infamy a junior high rock band is forced to confront the fact they can?t play a single song when a spiteful teacher plans to expose their charade by awarding them a spot in the schools annual variety show.

After concocting a scheme to achieve popularity, an inept rock band must fake their way through a high school variety show in order to disprove the intentions of a spiteful teacher.

What starts them off on their journey, in other words, what is the motivating event or inciting incident?

in addition, it isn't clear what they will do.? How will they achieve their goal, which is also unclear what specifically do they want?

Lastly, who is the protagonist?

A story needs to be defined by a framework of a finite number of events - start, middle, and end, a logline should to describe these clearly.

It would help if the vindictive teacher was the father of the love interest and thus his vendetta is personal.

"His plan to win the girl of his dreams; by putting together a fake band, is jeopardizes when a drunk-with-power teacher forces the faux rockers into the school talent show with the threat of expulsion if they lip sync."

PISTOLS & CARNATIONS
When a passionate but shitty junior high rock band concocts a scheme to achieve popularity and infamy at their school?s highly coveted variety show, its not only a success it goes viral and catches the attention of Super-Producer David Geffen. Now they have one Saturday night at the famed Whiskey a Go Go on the Sunset Strip in Hollywood to prove they?re the real thing.

I think this is an improvement in that it pits the band against a nemesis, a spiteful teacher, who is the reason they even get the gig. ?That's a good plot strategy because it gets a movie audience to root for them to succeed, to prove the teacher wrong.

However, I think the logline still wants for an objective goal. ?"Forced to confront" ?isn't an objective goal. ?In every movie, the protagonist is always "forced to confront" a ?problem. ?The objective goal and action line arises?not from that a protagonist ?must "confront" --?but how? they do so.

So, what becomes the objective goal for confronting the fact they can't play a song?

I like the concept. Perhaps try something like this ?"A middle school rock band is awarded a coveted spot in the school's variety show, only the band is a total fake. Now they must learn to play or face the music."