An intelligent but unsuccessful father must save his kids from terrorist who think that he is a Superhero.

Himanshu:

I've pondered your logline for a while and am still unsure about how the underlying logic of the premise plays out. ?What is the theme you are exploring? ?What is the emotional payoff ?-- what do you want the audience to think and feel after seeing the film?

A lot has been touched on already but I'll just say that you should change "intelligent", instead showing us how he is intelligent. Does he have a job that shows this (i.e. scientist, teacher?) or does he have an eidetic memory? Show don't tell, even if possible in a logline.

Hope this helps.

A lot has been touched on already but I'll just say that you should change "intelligent", instead showing us how he is intelligent. Does he have a job that shows this (i.e. scientist, teacher?) or does he have an eidetic memory? Show don't tell, even if possible in a logline.

Hope this helps.