After murdering an immigrant, he convinces his psychiatrist to declare him insane so as not to be put on trial, but a detective will follow his steps to lock him up.

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Neer Shelter Singularity · 55,464 pts

As the others have pointed out, best you focus on one main character and change the premise so it makes logical sense in the current legal system.

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dpg Singularity · 112,231 pts

Unfortunately, the premise is flawed.? Being declared insane won't get him off the legal hook.? ?He? will still be arrested. tried and convicted.? That's the way it works.? All that being declared insane might do is mitigate his sentence.? He might get a life sentence instead of the death penalty.

variable Summitry · 18,541 pts

Maybe somewhere along -- "When his wife's therapist pleads insane after killing her, a grieving detective must prove it otherwise and bring justice" (to make things personal for him...)