Able to wink only, paralyzed, but slowly recovering man agrees to sexual plays with a jealous nurse, but now he has to fight his helplessness, as he must stop her before she kills him and his family.

Helplessness

3 reviews

JanCabal Logliner · 544 pts

Thank you guys. I got your points. LincWilder you nailed it. I think that I can actually use that

LincWilder 0 pts

There's information in the logline that distracts from the premise, which, if I've read it correctly, is this:

A temporarily paralyzed man on the mend must fight his sense of helplessness to stop his mentally unstable nurse from killing him and his family.

dpg 112,231 pts

I think the premise has possibilities. But the logline raises as many questions in my mind as it answers. Such as:

Why would the nurse be jealous of a paralyzed man?

How could he communicate to her about sex -- let alone engage in it -- when he's 99.9% paralyzed?

And while the hanky-panky may be a part of they story, I'm not sure it's necessary to include in the logline. A logline should focus on the principal action which is murder, not sex.