A former lone wolf blackwater operative is forced back with his team to stop a terrorist organization from getting a mythological artifact that could destroyed the planet.

6 reviews

Valentin Samurai · 2,423 pts

When a mythological artefact with the cataclysmic capability is stolen by terrorists, a dishonourably discharged U.S. Navy seal must team back with his former team to prevent its activation.

Seems to be telling the same story without the Black Ops and Blackwater confusion. Dishonourable discharged adds tension to the team reunion.

KW Samurai · 856 pts

It took me a few seconds to grasp this logline with the phrase 'forced back'. I read as meaning 'forced to back away from'. As in 'they were forced back from the exploding car".? Also, if they are 'forced back' as in 'forced to return' then there are even more questions. Forced back from where, to where and by whom. Maybe consider rephrasing this part.

wendylou Penpusher · 181 pts

A few thoughts: if he's a lone wolf, why does he have a team? Do you mean an item that predates known history of man, as in was deposited here from a previous life form??? Also as with a previous comment, why would this be a bad thing?