A high school basketball phenom drops out of school and drifts for thirteen years, but his luck is about to change as the road to redemption, love, and a second chance runs right through McCallister Park.

3 reviews

dpg 112,231 pts

This bears a resemblance to "The Natural". ?Other than the sport, what distinguishes this from that film which was also about redemption, love and a 2nd chance?

And what is the inciting incident? ?Why did he drop out and drift for 13 years?

Former member 20 pts

Is he playing basketball at all in those thirteen years -- like grifting and conning Ala?White Men Can't Jump?or playing amateur leagues?

Why does he drop out of high school -- what is the inciting incident that causes this?

What changes his luck and offers him a chance at redemption (and this should really be the inciting incident, e.g.?When a once-prodigious basketball player gets a chance at redemption as...?

We would need more information to do a detailed logline. So far, this is far too vague and ambiguous. Hope this helps.

Karel Segers Mentor · 5,093 pts

Is he playing basketball at all in those thirteen years -- like grifting and conning Ala?White Men Can't Jump?or playing amateur leagues?

Why does he drop out of high school -- what is the inciting incident that causes this?

What changes his luck and offers him a chance at redemption (and this should really be the inciting incident, e.g.?When a once-prodigious basketball player gets a chance at redemption as...?

We would need more information to do a detailed logline. So far, this is far too vague and ambiguous. Hope this helps.