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It’s all fun and games at the cemetery for a twenty something gravedigger clinging to his youth, until his ex-girlfriend’s Mafioso father plots revenge for disrespecting his “little princess.”
My question to you is: what's all fun and games? It's so vague.
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A young couple become intruders in their own home after they discover it’s being shared by a couple who look exactly like them.
You tell us why they become intruders, but how? ?Does the couple who look exactly like them hunt them throughout the house? ?Or is there another force at work?
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Two brothers, Logan and Michael, are forced to fight against the Irish Mafia due to their father’s debt.
Maybe it's just me, but this doesn't stand out as much as it should. It's a crime drama, right, but I don't feel anything from this logline. Is the father dead, is he alive? Does he want to pay the…
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Being shot in the head is different for one young woman who lives in the moment, since instead of dying, she receives the responsibility of keeping heaven and hell from falling apart, or else an evil far worse than anyone can imagine will destroy everything and everyone.
I would like to know how she got this responsibility?
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When a troubled American expatriate is offered work at the Tengen Hotel, he soon discovers that Tokyo’s most exclusive hotel is also the base of operations for a major crime syndicate. Now embroiled in their conspiracy to appropriate control over the city, the expatriate must choose between duty or sentiment as both his mettle and loyalty are put to the test.
Updated for like the third time. Check it out! :)
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When a troubled American expatriate is offered work at the Tengen Hotel, he soon discovers that Tokyo’s most exclusive hotel is also the base of operations for a major crime syndicate. Now embroiled in their conspiracy to appropriate control over the city, the expatriate must choose between duty or sentiment as both his mettle and loyalty are put to the test.
I cover all that in script but if you really want to know the main character's backstory, I'll gladly tell you.
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When a troubled American expatriate is offered work at the Tengen Hotel, he soon discovers that Tokyo’s most exclusive hotel is also the base of operations for a major crime syndicate. Now embroiled in their conspiracy to appropriate control over the city, the expatriate must choose between duty or sentiment as both his mettle and loyalty are put to the test.
I have updated it so take a look!
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When a troubled American expatriate is offered work at the Tengen Hotel, he soon discovers that Tokyo’s most exclusive hotel is also the base of operations for a major crime syndicate. Now embroiled in their conspiracy to appropriate control over the city, the expatriate must choose between duty or sentiment as both his mettle and loyalty are put to the test.
A diaspora is basically an immigrant and there isn't a specific thing he must do to prove his loyalty. And I'm gonna be totally honest with you, this log line barely covers half of the script which is a television…
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In a futuristic society where the new government forbids humor, a brilliant stand-up comedian and his group of clumsy clowns must overthrow the iron rulers and bring back laughter before the Thought Police humor washes the population.
Could having humor on the Thought Police force be some kind of corruption?
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When three young men apart of the lad sub-culture beat up a civilian and steal his friend's camera, we become a fly-on-the-wall as we see what drives these three young men to do what they do as tensions arise as the night winds down, it leads to an implosion which devastates the community around them.
I see this as 'A Clockwork's Orange' in found footage. I wouldn't minding seeing that.
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In a futuristic society where the new government forbids humor, a brilliant stand-up comedian and his group of clumsy clowns must overthrow the iron rulers and bring back laughter before the Thought Police humor washes the population.
Why does the Thought Police have humor when the society has forbidden humor all together?
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A Nanny is mysteriously directed to the wrong house and is demanded to kill captive children for a soul hungry Entity whose time is running out to earn immortality; she must choose to save the children and escape or be tortured, forever captive with them.
I couldn't agree more with. i feel like I'm having the same issues with my log line: too much info, too little info
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A superhuman woman, that is expected to be a savior of the futuristic world with no energy, needs to be saved by a looser fanboy- though not from danger outside, but rather from her self.
Note: This is actually meant for comics(manga) script. Target audience is Y/A. Genre is sci-fi action/drama.
What do you mean by "looser"? Is he "looser" as in 'loose in the head' or "looser" as in laid back chill?
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A young street level dealer must navigate the mine field of gang culture to get out before the gang implodes in a bloody internal war.
Why are there killings? Can't he dropout of the gang without anyone noticing?
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Set in contemporary Japan, an American expatriate finds employment as a bartender at a residential hotel only to discover that it doubles as the base of operations for a major Yakuza syndicate.
Thanks for the feedback. Just updated now, tell me what you think.
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A Nanny is mysteriously directed to the wrong house and is demanded to kill captive children for a soul hungry Entity whose time is running out to earn immortality; she must choose to save the children and escape or be tortured, forever captive with them.
From what I've read, this seems to be a supernatural dramedy. My concern s the "personal power" part. What does it mean precisely? Does the personal power conflict with the nanny's bipolar disorder?
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Set in contemporary Japan, an American expatriate finds employment as a bartender at a residential hotel only to discover that it doubles as the base of operations for a major Yakuza syndicate.
Would it help if I mentioned that this is a log line intended for a television series?
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After a night of self destructive drinking a boy (Chris) discovers that his girlfriend (Anna) possesses the ability to remain immortal as long as she does not fall in love. As Chris' family life decays, he runs away from home with Anna to show her a life bereft of love is not one lived.
I like the concept, but what I don't understand is why the two main characters are still together if one doesn't truly love the other?
