Two brothers, Logan and Michael, are forced to fight against the Irish Mafia due to their father’s debt.

Delusion

4 reviews

Neer Shelter Singularity · 55,464 pts

Also what is the starting point of the story? What is the inciting incident?
This needs to directly relate to their goal which is what by the way? what do they actually need to achieve in their fight?

Hope this helps.

Adamu95 Penpusher · 280 pts

Maybe it's just me, but this doesn't stand out as much as it should. It's a crime drama, right, but I don't feel anything from this logline. Is the father dead, is he alive? Does he want to pay the debt or not? Can he even pay the debt? But that's just me.