When several wealthy young ski bums appear to commit suicide, a nerdy female police investigator must find a psychopath in the clannish world of the ski resort

5 reviews

dpg Singularity · 112,231 pts

Like Moses99 , I don't see a hook, a unique selling point that makes this stand out. ?Agree with Nir Shelter that the concept would benefit from the protagonist having personal stakes.

Former member Penpusher · 20 pts

I agree this is very confusing the way you've written it. I also agree with Richiev's rewrite in putting the protagonist at the head of the logline. It flows much better and makes sense.

My my main problem is what is the hook or unique selling point of your film? Why is this different than any of the hundreds of other psychopath-cop stories? Because it's set on a mountain? No.

Karel Segers Mentor · 5,093 pts

I agree this is very confusing the way you've written it. I also agree with Richiev's rewrite in putting the protagonist at the head of the logline. It flows much better and makes sense.

My my main problem is what is the hook or unique selling point of your film? Why is this different than any of the hundreds of other psychopath-cop stories? Because it's set on a mountain? No.