Where screenwriters learn the form and logline their screen ideas.
Sometime ago I had the idea for that movie and starting writing the script for it, but did not finish it yet.
I have not found a good for the script yet (it should be historical and dinosaur-y, like “Raptors against Charlemagne”).
Thank you for your feedback.
So, using your and elbigelow's advice, what about something like this:
"A dinosaur army is conquering the Holy Roman Empire and only Charlemagne's handpicked elite troop The Scara stands in their way."
I dropped the year/epoch, Charlemagne should be enough indication of the historical setting.
Also, I could use more species of dinosaurs, I only had some breed of Utahraptor in mind, so far, but why not a second one?
While the business magnate is the main force behind the whole event, without more information she does not add anything to the logline.
Maybe like that:
"Charlemagne's elite squad The Scara have protected the Holy Roman Empire for years, but can they defeat an army of dinosaurs, lead by the richest woman in the world - who pulls some of the Scara to her side?"
That some of the Scara yield to the temptation of power is an important plotpoint - still, I'd like to do better...
I'd also recommend clarifying that the raptors are dinosaurs in the logline. Especially with your usage of the term Raptor army.
Interesting subject. I would lose the "when in" part and find a way to rewrite the last line without using parenthesis.