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Based on true events and set 70,000 years; a smart female hunter is elected to lead her tribe out of Africa. Climate change, starvation, animal attacks; other humans; betrayal all challenge their very survival and a fate which could change the modern world.
Heh thanks Monique, That's a good new logline, do you mind if I use that (with a few changes) in my query letters?
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Based on true events and set 70,000 years; a smart female hunter is elected to lead her tribe out of Africa. Climate change, starvation, animal attacks; other humans; betrayal all challenge their very survival and a fate which could change the modern world.
Yeah I've done quite a bit of research on it. The two main events are the Toba volcano explosion (biggest one in 25 million years, caused a few extinctions and started a new ice age), and the out of Africa…
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When a cash-strapped suburban family decides to host a foreign exchange student for extra money, their hyperactive son Marty goes into panic mode when the exchange student he's sharing a room with turns out to be a space alien who may or may not be planning an invasion.
Interesting concept, i'll just add that I think you could shorten the logline by changing may or may not to "he thinks" (is planning etc etc). says the same thing but makes it a bit shorter.
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A Brilliant but reckless mechanic promises his dying brother that he will save the one girl who can cure a zombie-plague before the military kill her.
Sounds interesting, the facebook photos look really good. My only question is why do the military want to kill her? I think brevity works for loglines but it does seem a bit odd that the only person who can cure…
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A 10,000 year old alien takes human form and becomes a super powerful paraplegic in his attempt to save the Earth from destruction.
Seems potentially interesting... though what destruction does the earth needed to be saved from?
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When in 800 AD a business magnate frees warmongering breeders of Raptors to conquer the Holy Roman Empire, only the Charlemagne's elite troop Scara (minus those who joined the Raptor army) stands in their way.
I'd also recommend clarifying that the raptors are dinosaurs in the logline. Especially with your usage of the term Raptor army.
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a retired war man in a mental hospital, attacks the nurse while he hallucinates he still in the battlefield.
Yeah, this sounds like an interesting premise(for a short or something) but doesn't sound like a movie without additional information.
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Based on a true story, set 70,000 years ago about a smart female hunter elected to lead her tribe out of Africa. Climate change, death, starvation, wild animals, betrayal and war with another tribe all stand between them and the arc of history.
Ok rather then write a new logline. I'll change the arc of history bit to. "all stand between them and a fate which will change the entirety of the ever after"
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70,000 years ago a young female hunter is elected to lead her tribe out of Africa. Death, starvation, wild animals and other humans all stand between them and the arc of history.
Ok thanks both, good points. I've updated the logline and added a new one. Let me know what you think.
