elbigelow

I can see great potential for this comedy. What goes wrong when this gold digger tries to reel in the local bachelor? You should drop a hint of what her conflict is going to be so potential viewers/readers become invested…

Hmm, interesting angle making the Army reject disgruntled. At the moment I'm finishing up the book but it feels a little flat in the conflict department, so I'm thinking about adding some type of sub-Earth species living in the deep.…

Absolutely. There is a young Army reject who is searching for some purpose in his life. This will be, of course, his moment to step up and do something big with his life. I finished the novel already, but I…

They are dealt a huge blow when they find out a rescue may take weeks due to toxic gases near the surface, and the collapsed asphalt. And then, to make matters worse, they discover that they are not alone down…

Cool idea. In the first line, I would use "from" instead of "in" and the last sentence is a fragment. Rewrite it if possible and you're onto something.

Interesting subject. I would lose the "when in" part and find a way to rewrite the last line without using parenthesis.