When an alcoholic son discovers his father gets occasionally possessed by a harmful evil spirit, he must protect his family from danger that threatens them and then find a way to stop it for good.

by janpermadi Penpusher · 41 pts 631 views

4 reviews

Neer Shelter Singularity · 55,464 pts ★ Accepted

The order of the descriptions is wrong - he must stop it for good in order to protect his family...

I suggest you describe the possession of the father as a definitive event instead of an arbitrary one.

Here is my try:

After a father becomes possessed, his alcoholic son recruits a priest to help stop the evil spirit for good in order to save his family.

csantan2 Logliner · 381 pts

I suggest adding a conflict which makes it difficult for the son to kick the alcohol habit.

Foxtrot25 Summitry · 17,380 pts

Not much to add over the above great points except, being an alcoholic isn't much of a hurdle to temporarily overcome during this event. I mean, just stop drinking until the spirit is dealt with then party on.