When a young woman foresees her community?s catastrophic doom, she must choose between keeping a solemn promise – and telling the life-saving truth.
The Face of Clarity (mk 2)
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The Face of Clarity (mk 2)
Who did she make the promise to? Why do they want her to stay quiet? How is the promise connected to the catastrophic doom?
I see the story as her promise not her struggle. The way it is positioned doesn't the balance the drama. Sacrifice is choosing between two equal values. Saving lives or keeping a promises is not balanced. The secret must be huge so it needs describing.
If the promise is just a way of introducing stakes and a ticking clock for her rehab, there may be a better way.
Strong not string....sorry :-)