When a lone woman driving on an open country road and carrying cocaine that must reach its destination or else is menaced by a deranged truck driver, she must learn how to survive the day.

Road of Terror

4 reviews

hihello8484 Logliner · 445 pts

When a lone woman driving on an open country road and carrying cocaine that must reach its destination is menaced by a deranged truck driver, she learns to survive the day, the hard way.

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dpg Singularity · 112,231 pts

So she's a drug mule. Why would I want to sympathize with someone involved in the illicit drug trade? Care whether or not she succeeds, survives?

FFF Mentor · 7,850 pts

Hello, this part need clarification (it's what the plot is about): "learn how to survive the day".
The first part is too wordy, and shoud mention a clear inciting event instead of a long description of the situation.