When a gifted teacher and healer discovers a key which unlocks her deeply buried past she lets go of everything she knows and goes on an incredible journey which totally transforms her life.

Spiral Dragon

2 reviews

Alexpsmith Penpusher · 10 pts

Whats the hero's flaw ,it is a bit vauge , what are the stakes and then the goal .I think you need facts and details a sense of time is vital to the logline importance ,ask Karelcheck the TBT Ostentatious rapper ?

APS.

A traumatised teacher is forced to question her murderous past , uncovering a key piece of evidence she is.
now trapped in the crimes conclusion as time ticks away she must unlock her future and rewrite history . .

ChasFisher 0 pts

Sounds interesting to your average audience member, but for people in the industry there is very little here. What is the conflict? The drama? It just sounds like a gifted person has a really great time. Road movies (which this sounds like) is a really hard sell as well.

So:
- What is the protag's flaw?
- What is the antagonist/primary conflict?
- What are the stakes?